Lily.
Oh Lily, you really
look ill,
since I saw you got
moved into
this dirty dry spot
you have
lost lots of firmness.
Your frilly white dress
is ever
so yellow and now your
poor head
looks ready to topple.
Lily you must not stop
wanting to
live, you need to show
stronger grit.
I know Lily this might
sound silly
to you but your future
health risk
will be killing me too.
I have given you salts
to bring back
your lovely clear skin
and brought
you bits of nutrition
but Lily
you're quickly falling.
You look green round
the gills,
and more sickly today,
Lily I know
you have been through
the mill
so until I can find you
some good
wholesome place I will
take you from
here Lily to my home.
You can no longer cope
with arid
neglect, so, come live
with me Lil.
and bloom for a while
in my little
pool, renewing I hope.
Poor Lily you ought
not to be
found without feet in
clean ground
surrounded by water
which is
as sweet as it is pure.
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Author:
Fay Slimm. (
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- Comment from author about the poem: A fancy for writing a light poem with serious message overtook my mind after viewing the picture........... hope you enjoy
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Oh lol, good write Fay. Is she related to Fag-Ash Lil?!
Glad you enjoyed the read Orchi. No relation I hasten to say.
Now THERE is an expression of love for an often overlooked beauty. What a wonderful thought, to take a poorly, struggling plant and offer it a new life, a new chance to be what it was conceived to be.
Lovely thoughts behind this piece Fay.
Van Gogh came to mind. He painted sunflowers several times during his illness and recovery. If you notice, most of the paintings contain sunflowers in a very poor condition.
Yes many a plant could do with a bit of TLC in times like these when not much thought is given to such things in the face of profit etc........ Your comment is greatly appreciated D.A.
the world needs more of these fancies ... poor Lily .. but what about the Roses, the Violets & Pansies.... there y'are a nice little bit o horti culture............... Neville
I will keep in mind the flowers of the hedgerows Nev. and promise a verse about their plight too..... thanks so much for dropping by and reading the shame brought by pollution etc............ Fay
I could not agree more ... we need more pollination too and bees of course and... and .. and
N
You'll save her Fay! A natural born healer you............
Dear Lorna - thank you for dropping by and for your most encouraging comment.
Oh the world of the nymphaea - great write Fay.
Many thanks Michael for the read and comment - - water has to be unpolluted to keep such lilies alive 'tho I fear this is only the tip of the iceberg - the world of flora in all sorts of places is shrinking in size and this fact I wanted to highlight. Glad you enjoyed the piece.
Maybe if you had gotten to her before
You may have extended her life a little more
But all living things have a shelf live in Gods store
Soon to become a memory, to recall, as you see the sunset by the shore
Top marks for the thoughtful comment dear friend - -
May Lily show the beauty within her soul as a gracious way of saving her.
Thank you for your caring concern dear Andy - - flowers have beauty we as humans can never replicate should they become endangered or worse.
GOOD EVENING FAY : ANGELA HERE : Its 10am WEDNESDAY and I'm so excited because my PAPA & MAMA arrived yesterday and are Staying with Ruths Aunt & Uncle ! I have a week off Work to show them round Auckland (first visit to NZ) and visit some local Vineyards. PAPA will give some Lectures on RIOJA WINE which is very popular in NZ ! I loved this POEM ! Brians Parents have a pond with WATER LILLIES and despite it being a bit stagnant (since the PUMP broke !) it does produce very beautiful LILLIES ! I love the PHOTO : Love all Water Lillies ! I like the story you tell in your very elegantly structured Poem.
In the opening verses we have the LILY discovered & described ! In verses 4 & 5 you give some TLC and offer a New Home ! In verses 6 & & You have found her a New Home where HER beauty can FLOURISH - It is a wonderful PARABLE about how we could (and should) care for Animals & our fellow Humans who survive in a POOR ENVIRONMENT ! Thanks for Sharing & Caring
Blessings & Peace & Love
Yours as always ANGELA 🧡🧡🧡🧡
What a lovely break you are taking with your parents dear Angela - - making such happy memories is vital to families and wishing you all a wonderful reunion - - glad you found time to read and comment on the fate of poor Lily - I wanted to highlight in a light verse the more serious condition of polluted environments and the drop in surviving numbers of living things as a result and am so pleased you enjoyed the write. ........ Hugs galore.
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