Attack.
As sinks the cherry-plum sun
a hawk
unleashes his fire
and over naked-elm hill dives,
plume-tight,
!
!
!
straight downwards,
hangs in still air momentarily
wide-eyed and loose clawed
raptor then crashes
*!*
into a lone sparrow's chatter,
writing death warrant
**!**
*.*
*
in whitening dusk.
^^^^^^
^^^^
Weight of sudden attack
met success with
feathered explosion from
battle-high rush
of pitched buckle surprise.
* "" *
^ ^ ^ ^ ^ ^ ^
Grieving the slain I then spy
on moth-night's
distant and darkling horizon
a mate
~ - 0> almost stationary
in the ether
- -- - perhaps waiting
for brood's late feed
she, snatching bait in what
seems frenzy
quickly shoots tree-ward
~ ~ ~ ~ ~
before dark blackens sky
to ebony crystal.
As sinks the cherry-plum sun
I admit
that for chicks to exist
hunger has to be sated and
hawk's display,
!
!
by accurate awesome speed
of nature's raw
beauty invites recognition
for such fearless skill.
~ ~ ~
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Author:
Fay Slimm. (
Offline) - Published: March 1st, 2022 04:18
- Comment from author about the poem: Due to damaged wrist cannot type well but my grateful thanks to all who leave a comment on this re-post - - hope you enjoy
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Comments8
You can beat an egg, but you can't beat a raptor, either for speed, or beauty ....................... made me wanna float up yonder with them windhovers leeward ........ and I do remember this un well Fay ... x
I can feel the ambivalence Fay, in your perfectly calibrated piece (which I've not read before). Nature in the raw, and that's the way it goes...
I hope you heal fast.
oh no, both you and Neville
taking damage
someone, must be trying to take out
the very best of MPS
before they starts their poetic warmongering...
lol
(hope you get well soon, dear Fay)
and thank you, I too remember this read
especially these wondrous lines:
'snatching bait
in what seems frenzy
quickly shoots tree-ward
~ ~ ~ ~ ~
before
dark blackens sky
to ebony crystal.
As sinks
the cherry-plum sun
I admit
that for chicks
to exist
hunger has to be sated'
Good write Fay.
What a magnificent display Fay! This hawk feels so real and alive! I also enjoy the creative incorporation of text symbols to convey the message. Hope your wrist gets better! Have a great day!
Wonderful read, Fay.
A great read thank you! Hope your wrist is improving.
I so enjoy watching raptors, very elegant birds Fay and you words surely do them justice.
Andy
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