I used to see the blue silk up there
With a wondrous mind – like the one of a child.
I believed in perfection,
I believed that was actually possible.
Yet the sky differs now that I’m older.
There was once just a vastitude of blue,
And nothing more than that.
But I’ve learned that the world is a dangerous place...
One that requires attentive positioning of the foot,
To not accidentally step on broken glass,
Or fall down a rabbit hole.
I also learned that others only care about their needs.
I’m not cynical, but it’s a fact.
I close the curtains because of that.
I learned to lift up the visor of gullibility,
And see the undraped sky for what it really is.
I discovered that there are hidden storms beyond the naked eye.
Because once you step into the “real world,”
You’re instantly confronted with the reality that the only
Firm shoulders to lie on - are your own.
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Author:
Rocky Lagou (
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- Comment from author about the poem: Today I really had a tough time trying to write a poem, it's strange because they usually flow naturally but I had to "crumple up" like 5 different attempts. I'm glad with this result though, a coming of age per se. ⚡⚡⚡
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Crumpling is part of the process. Happens to the best of us. I’ve had to learn to relish crumpling with a flourish. Thanks for sharing.
Very true words dear poet. I feel like writing poetry is such a befuddling thing to explain to someone else because it's like an actual moment of transcendence beyond the natural and into the otherworldly. It's pretty magical to be honest, but I'm really glad you could "relish" my words. Have a wonderful day!
Perhaps this why we keep coming back to it. One of several reasons, really. And who pulls away from a magical moment! Thanks again.
Hello Rocky,I can totally relate to this one,I have always been a ponderer and it is so easy to be cynical if we're not mindful that there is alot of goodness beneath or on top of our shoulders too.
So true Dean, I don't like to come across as "cynical" to other people because I feel like it's just a bad first impression but I wouldn't say I'm totally not cynical either. I believe that people's first instinct are to want ever from birth, but I also believe that we can learn to be more selfless. So if we do miraculously find that other person that is truly not trying to harm you or use you then just maybe you can rely on another shoulder that is not your own. Thanks so much for the dissection, have a great day!
A descriptive poem Rocky.
Hello dear Orchi, thanks so much. I hope you felt my vibe, hehe.
It happens sometimes Rocky. But clearly you persevered and created a very good and well grounded poem. Keep it up!
Thanks a bunch Saxon. That's very true, it's the perserverance that matters after all. I'm honestly very very overyjoyed to see that you could connect with my poem today. When we're younger were often consumed by false notions that everything is picture-perfect but the "real world" is far from that. Have a great day!
It’s good Rocky! Creativity is not easy!. Good write, thanks!
All the thanks goes to you dear poet. Thanks so much for stopping by and leaving such a generous comment, I truly hope you could take something from this piece. Have a lovely day!
Definitely, finding positivity in the real world is hard going. They're fighting over ''THE END IS NIGH placards in Britain.
It's crazy because I confront those exact same signs here in Miami. People really think that this is the end, and honestly it might just be. Nonetheless, it's really nice to see you by here Paul, you're very kind, have a great day!
Goodness, evil, indifference? It's all there if you look for it and then whilst looking you'll find a contradiction because nothing is easy.
Me,I'm a great believer in weeds. Weeds are supposed to be undesireable yet wherever neglect is rife a weed appears. So what are weeds - good? evil? indifferent? None of those... weeds is weeds.
P.S. If i don't feel like writing it's generally because I've nothing to say. I can look at the stuff I forced and see it lacking in something, even if it found healthy acclaim, it still lacks something in my own eyes.
Wow Dusk, thanks so much for the enlightnement. I honestly feel that same way about good and evil, it's a human construct that lies purely on one's own morality. One can see something as acceptable, while another can view that same thing as abominable. It's all in the way we see life. Thanks so much Dusk for stopping by, I also relate to writing something and then looking back it and feeling like it's "hollow" or "missing something." It's all about inspiration I guess. Regardless, have a wonderful day!
You are an astonishing poet. and you are completely right about how our views of the world change as we get older. But I think the best thing to do is just to realize that the world isn't completely rotten, not yet. It might be a bit crude but maybe just maybe we can cut around the rotten parts? To get to the untouched center, and rebuild from there
Hello dear poet, thank you so much for such a generous compliment. I truly strive to create poetry that resonates with others, and I feel like there's a special connection that links the "reader" and the "poet." Your words are so true as well, I also believe that there's still good in the world, but we ALL have to put in our part to unearth it. I hope one day it becomes reality. Thanks again, and have a great day!
I agree completely! It has to be a group effort, if everyone does their part then the world would be a much better place. Unfortunately for us, the chances of that are like 30/70. Maybe one day!
Good words Rocky, the only people to trust are yourself and your true loves.
Andy
True words Andy, I feel that relying on others is bound to lead to betrayal or a consuming sense of interdependence. But it is pivotal that we at least find a comfortable sense of trust with someone else. Thanks so much for stopping by dear poet, have a wonderful day!
it would seem that enlightenment has occurred my friend .. each day I recite my Dokun which contains more than just a few of the points you have raised here ......... Neville
Thanks so much Neville, I try to resonate with the reader and I feel like that reverberation was heard with you. Life is chaotic and dangerous, but our careful treadding can make all the difference. Have a lovely day!
I find that what flows freely exposes the inner self. Yet you have managed to still give us food for thought
Very true words. What "flows" naturally from us is usually the purest form of what we want to express. And to see you could find some space to ponder about my words is also really uplifting. I hope you continue to feel inspired! Have a wonderful day!
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