Just As Sunsets
As we sit here
together upon these
only recently
displaced fragments
of ancient mountains ..
And we contemplate
the single orange
segment going down
upon the far horizon ..
A cold chill sets in
but slow, and we both
begin to imagine we
can still feel its dying glow ..
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Neville (
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I saw the sunset..Well penned.
bless you .. thanks a million .. here's wishing you all good things .. Neville
Very sensual as well as beautiful but melancholic with a sense of sadness yet fulfilment. I like the taste of this fine wine. A great vintage
I could not ask for more .. thank you so much .. Neville
Our imagination brings a spark, united vision fuels passion… sunsets are potent prompts.
Thankfully it aint rocket science .. otherwise I would maybe have to re-work this little un .. Neville
Amazing
Cheers
You're welcome Nevilie
A fine write N.
Thank you Steven
As the "Sunsets" behind "displaced fragments of ancient mountains" It signifies the end of a relationship, though both sense, maybe, a rekindling. This is a
gorgeous way to symbolize the dark coldness of parting ways. There is a sadness with a splinter of hope expressed here. Great symbolism and a scene we've all lived through. - Phil A.
I can't thank you enough Phil, so hope my biggest of THANK YOU's will suffice .. Neville
The delicious silence within which this seems to occur, subtly warming to heights unspoken leaves me half breathless and without words. Lovely and so beautifully rendered with a mild and subtle poignancy. Thank you very much for sharing.
I am much more than grateful and you ma'am, are far more than merely eloquent .. many thank Q's .. Neville
My pleasure, Sir. You're very welcome.
And imagine you must, treasure these times to help offset less happy ones. Good job.
I do find jotting things down .. words mainly, often helps .. thank you Dan .. Neville
But that glow will always return Neville to bring that brightness back.
Andy
Thanks Andy
But then if you look within, the Sun never really sets. 😁
I tried and near went blind .. but I get it .. a bit like a jelly I guess, it wobbles .. yeah, a bit like me 😎☀️🌞👍
Weebles wobble but they don't fall down. 😎
Ok , so I imagine there is a visual of orange triangular shrinking fading luminous segment but you’re sneaky so I believe the togethered cuddle with smiling minds drifting toward comfortable and warm is both of you are still engaged with the energy of recent intimacy and wantonly enjoying every joule of its after glow.
Just Sayin’ !
You got it .. music to my core 🎶🎶🎵🎵🎵🎶
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