Eyes watching from the unseen
Premonition of a pain smell
naked, homeless, without screen
every sound a death bell's knell
Bug prickles across the flesh
Pieces of glass under the skin
electrical charges, muscles contract and mesh
pulled into a fetal circle for past sin
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Now that was very real, excruciating!
Thank you so much for your comment as always it is most gracious and welcome in the support that it offers
You are most welcome, friend (mindful while using word of your recent poem on human connections) 😊👍🏻👍🏻🙏🏻
Guantanamo Bay?
Wasn’t there. Don’t know what that was like, but do you know fear. Thanks for the response and support
Painful reading my friend, brilliantly executed as always, packing a massive punch and reflection. 🌹 Something I have suffered from is definitely fear but I always try to overcome even if it takes a while.
Thank you, Teddy. I appreciate your continued reading of my poems and support. That is always very welcome.
I'll give KP, not pieces of glass under the skin (that's going too far, says Fido to me), but bug prickles across the flesh - as in creepy crawlies lol.
Thanks so much Orchi It’s good that Fido has a sense of morality. I appreciate the read and kind words.
Fido says - be horrible to her at times, but don't kill her off. Doh!
........................... could this be a portrait of purgatory by any chance .. asking because I am both intrigued and very nosey .. 😉🐧👍
Only a living purgatory in which we all live from time to time. Thanks, Neville I appreciate sufficient attention for a person to be nosy
Wow! Powerful expression of fear, and your use of language to describe that which is so universal, really delivers. Well done, my friend! 🌹👏
Thank you so much, Tristan. I appreciate your comments and kind words of support. They mean a great deal.
You have summed up the emotion
of fear here Soren superbly. Not an place any of us wants to visit. Well penned.
Thank you so much, Cassie. I appreciate your reading of this poem and your understanding of the emotional point that it makes. Your words are supportive and helpful and deeply appreciated.
Soo profound! The flow, the agony….
I think you’re very much for your most supportive and kind words. They are deeply appreciated and valued.
"Though your sins are like scarlet, they will be white as snow. If they are red as crimson, they will become like wool."
How does this happen? Nothing like a mystery to get the juices flowing!
Forgiveness is the soap that cleanses the soul but first one must forgive one self. Thank you so much for your insightful words and kind support. It is most appreciated.
Thanks for the comment, Soren. I heard the reason it`s so hard to forgive ourselves is we have a deeply-held anger towards ourselves. Well, the work goes on!
Luckily I have been a good boy for most of my life soren. LOL
Andy
Kind of you to comment Andy I thank you for your support and suppose that there are a few like you that had a quieter childhood.
Sir, like you added an additional chapter to Dante‘s Inferno all of that would be a hell descriptive queasy. I’m glad I’m not at that place. You did a good job man you stayed with the story and stuck with it and delivered. Nice job. Sensei.
Once again, you are too kind, Bobby. I appreciate your comments. Send thank you for them.
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