I was young once but now I'm in Rio
I loved yesterday but found I couldn't pay the price
Fidelity came packaged in a love triangle trio
Should have taken Lao Tzu's advice
Sunday's melt on the grill
Saturdays have wrinkled cloths
The president is on the morning after pill
The poet writes with a rubber hose
Stained glass pages of history's book
Once love now a noose, I begin to dance
The mythical fish got off Proverb's hook
With my hands tied it's hard to pull up my pants
I spent Charon's coins paying for a life ill spent
I'm so far under cover I need an air vent
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Good write SB. And now my next poem: 'Twice'. heehee.
With that addition we have binary and thus computers were born. Thanks Orchi appreciate you taking your time to sort through my rubbish.
I sort through your rubbish, not meaning your poems (!) but to find foods and recipe ideas for KP! lol.
great write, thoroughly enjoyed
Thank you Norman for taking your time to read this drift away from my normal tendencies. It is most appreciated
you are most welcome
Where does life get to?
Yesterday I was young, and now the stairs are attacking me.
Okay, just found an online potion that takes 50 years off you, I'm sorted.
Thanks so much for the read and words of support. I wonder if that was the same online site that sells real estate in heaven.
Bound to be.
Just been told my ailment is not life threatening - that means I've got to put up with myself for a few years yet - however this superb surrealist write helps make it worthwhile.
They won't tell me how much longer I've got, that frustrates the hell out of me. Thanks for the read Michael it is always most appreciated
Time to breathe! Whew solid!
Thanks William I appreciate the review my friend
Most welcome
Merging the comical with the profound in that signature rhyming disposition , a fave for me and much enjoyed the read, Sincerely, Elizabeth
So good to hear from you Elizabeth your words have cheered the day and I thank you
My pleasure Sorren, it’s always a wonderful experience to read your poetry and I am so glad to have cheered the day. Thankyou for your comment on my piece (I can’t seem to be able to reply to it so I’m sorry I hope it’s ok to do so here), yes the feeling of being buried alive really resonates with what I was hoping to portray here. Thankyou again for your illuminated verse and the reflections of your wonderful mind. Sincerely, Elizabeth
You are most welcome regarding your poem and keep writing
It’s irreverent, philosophical, and a little unhinged....the holy trinity, imho. Every stanza bends logic to confession. A hell of a ride, my friend. Loved it! 🌹🖤🙏🕯️🐦⬛
Thank you Tristan Your review is most appreciated and valued.
Every stanza a new adventure! Good write!
Thank you very much for the read and words of encouragement NingaGirl
Of course!
Delightful Sonnet, Soren. Well done.
Thank you so much for the read and kind words Jerry they are always appreciated
I really liked the way “Once” mixes regret with sharp, surreal images. The shifts from youth and love into satire, presidents on pills, poets with hoses all make it feel like a dream unraveling into absurdity. That final turn with Charon’s coins ties it all back to mortality and wasted chances. It’s raw, witty, and haunting all at once. Thanks for putting it out there. 🙏🕊️
Your kindness is most appreciated my friend and I thank you for the read.
Fine words soren, life can change in a moment, and with age it gets slower and more confusing.
Andy
Indeed so true Andy thanks so much for the review and comment it is deeply valued
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