In a child we see eagerness
Sometimes even happiness
Their own inner world
Is more o less untouched
On a teenager you see
Search and longing
Many times confusion
Anger so deep it scratches inside
As an adult two things can happen
Pretend to be alive and happy
Or just empty and alone
Which one you are?
Their eyes can’t lie
We can only hide our hearts
As time goes by
Don’t let your eyes go blind.
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Author:
Dolphine (Pseudonym) (
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- Comment from author about the poem: Forgive yourself and the mistakes you make in order to really see with open eyes.
- Category: Forgiveness
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It is fascinating, for it reminds me of the saying "the eyes are the window to the soul" or somesuch, which you have well expressed....and in light of that, can your concluding stanza really be true....i.e. can we really manage to hide our hearts? We hide our eyes to do so, seems to me. And I agree with your explanatory comment that if we forgive ourselves we will better see....instead of being blinded by our mistakes (and those of others?) I love the concluding two lines,...it is a serious warning....I hope we may all heed it.
Thank you so much. You really like and think on what I'm trying to say and I appreciate it very much, and mostly that is my idea of expression. To try to put my ideas of awaking of consciousness on a thinking level, well I want to help on what I can to make this world a better place to life; I hope that our thoughts and actions can help us get there.
You are a very sensitive and really sweet person and I really believe that you will archive anything that you dream, that is my wish to you.
Best,
Dolphine
Thanks Dolphine....Do we archive, as you say, what we dream in our poetry...is that what you mean?
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Very true and very well written. Posing the last line of part 3 as a question gives it extra significance to to the reader, in fact a considerable amount of extra significance. Does the poem a lot of good in my most humble opinion!
Thank you so much! I'm so glad to share this.
I want to challenge the readder and with that, make them be inside as well.
Best
Dolphine.
I see this poem as a progression of life. The eyes which are supposed to be the mirrors of our souls are also the hiders of sadness, angst and downright misery.
I found the adult stanza the most compelling because so often we pretend to be alive as you suggested. In other words we just go along to get along, an awful way to have to live. It destroys the inner you and something inside you dies.
Great mind-examining poetry.
Thank you so much! I tend to think on an existentialistic way on an introspective and well this is my reflection on the conclusion.
Best
Dolphine.
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