Emi

Cinderella

Cinderella Cinderella

There at the ball

Dancing with her love

Not thinking at all

 

She knows not

Her beau in black

But of passion and want

Her smiles do not lack

 

Deeper in supposed love

She falls headfirst

As his starry-eyed words

Quench her thirst

 

At the chime of the clock

Her mind awakes

Instantly perceiving

All her mistakes

 

From the room

She does flee

Freed from her lovesick dream

She finally does see

 

Her love was a hoax

Crafted and fake

She knew nothing of the man

For whom her heart did ache

 

She left behind a shoe

Of silver glass

For later her swain to find

And mourn his lost lass

 

He looked through every home

In every village and town

And found only hopeful misses

Hoping for the crown

 

When he spotted

His inamorata at last

He was distressed to find

Her love for him had past

 

With another

Whom she knew well

Cinderella lived happily

Ever after

 

Comments6

  • Alexandre Landsley

    Really nice!

    • Emi

      Thank you! 🙂

    • dbremner

      You made a very good job of it.

      • Emi

        Thanks for your nice comment. 🙂

      • Belinda AMeharry

        The safe harbour

        • Emi

          Yeah. 🙂 Thanks for your comment! 🙂

        • Cheeky Missy

          Hahaha! I quite enjoyed your alternate version to the old fairy tale! Lovely! Delightful! Congratulations! Excellent! And seriously, an excellent admonition to all. I love this one!

          • Emi

            Thanks for your comment and your rating!! 🙂 🙂

          • Marius

            For a moment I thought the story itself was written after your poem... until I read the ending. Beautifully written and definitely an alternative; but I wonder: did she settle?

            • Emi

              Awww thanks for your nice comment! 🙂 In my mind she did, though it's really up to interpretation... 🙂

            • Anna

              It`s so cool how you took the story of Cinderella and made it your own! Sweet!!
              Also, I`m sorry I kept commenting so much, but I just couldn`t help myself! Your poems are super brilliant!!!

              • Emi

                Haha thanks 🙂 This was one of my first poems. 🙂



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