"A Fortnight of Valentines"---my latest (crazy)whimsy....a collection of sappy sonnet (attempts), fraught with redundancy, and so hastily executed and crafted by imaginative fancy as to hopefully not be too repulsive to the reader. And yes, fairly UNedited, presently.
Day eleven
(sonnet attempt # XXXI)
XXXI
O let us wander in the gloaming, love,
And venture forth ere daylight breaks,
Observe with tremulous adoring lakes
Soft rippling, motionless, kissed from above,
Once-glowing verdure dark'ning in the sun's
Romantic waning light. Then as morn wakes
With sweetest trilling, breathlessly partake
In all the joy of newborn day begun.
And while mists swirl alluringly all round,
Mysterious, adventuresome, refine
Our search in love's haunts by all which surrounds:
The whisp'ring breeze, love promising defines
Our hearts' fondest murmurs, sweetly resounds
That I'm all yours, and you're mine, Valentine!
23Jan11
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Author:
Chic George (Pseudonym) (
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- Comment from author about the poem: Indulging in Charles Tennyson Turner's "A Summer Twilight" sonnet and discovering his original word in the first line was "gloaming," the romantic term suggested a possible valentine sonnet....which initially beginning promisingly with the first quatrain, faltering, stumbled into the sestet, struggling along to its frustratingly rough conclusion. Maybe I'll just rework it, maybe trash the entire piece and begin anew?
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Another really good one! No need to alter this at all, I love it!
Aw, sweet....thank you very much!!! I do appreciate your comment and vote of confidence.
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