HAIKUS: 5 & 6.
A stream that runs straight
it shines on its short journey
and froths in the pan.
Scatter his ashes
always welcome blowing wind
in death as in life.
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Author:
Michael Edwards (
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Okay so haikus are supposed to be funny but why not. There are only 'rules' in poetry - no laws. If rules were meant to be broken why write them in the first place? Plus a watercolour of my town. Went into town yesterday - the sun was out and the centre is a riot of colour with large tubs of flowers everywhere - regularly voted in the top 10 best towns to live in the UK - I feel honoured to live here. (Well actually I live in a village just outside the town so I get the best of both worlds.)
Good write.
Like the painting as well.
Your talent with brush and water always amazes and this piece today just took my breath with its lines of reality - a wonderful treat to see your portfolio my friend - - and yes the haikus raised a smile with their terse wit. Perfectly done again Michael.
Thanks once again Fay - your comments are always so encouraging.
Good write and great pic. If we were fussy, we could insist Haikus MUST be 5.7.5. But it don't matter if they are not always exact - unless we're counting! lol.
Well yes but I would argue that these are 5.7.5 if pronounced correctly (RP English of course) - anyway glad you like them.
Yes, I agree, these are 5.7.5. I joke that I get fussy! heehee. No one will lose any sleep over it, if they weren't exact.
Thanks MICHAEL ~ Two more HAIKU with gentle humour accompanied by a an equally gentle painting ! Thanks for caring and sharing. For JAPANESE HAIKU and SENRYU there are rules as strict as the EU ~ but we English have more laissez faire and subject is as important as style. So we aim for 5-7-5 but don't always achieve it ~ we are renowned globally for our humour and we like our ditties to rhyme so my HAIKU (and SENRYU) often break three GOLDEN RULES and I am careful never to visit JAPAN ! In your comment I think you committed the word NOT after the forth word. Like the infamous "Sinners Bible" which states the Seventh Commandment as THOU SHALT COMMIT ADULTERY ~ It sold out in a day ! Yours BRIAN Please check my Poem ~ Thanks B
Committed? I think I omitted is the word - apologies we all get it wrong from time to time - aw heck off to do some gardening. Cheers Brian.
Blown away Michael 🙂
Keep off the beans.
Ha Ha
I just call this " I like it" and the painting too!
Good show - cheers Willy.
So very good Michael
Well done....
Me and my lovely
Wife have just been
To the pier in my
Town for a walk
Around the marina
Your painting looks like
Exactly where we parked
Cheers PH - this is the top of the High Road in Market Harborough. Just had a big row because BT removed a telephone box situated where the dark shadows are in this painting. After a great furore they have agreed to replace it. Oh the trials and tribulations of local politics.
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