AUTUMN SUN
The ripened rays of autumn sun
across the quivering water’s edge
announce the day that’s just begun
the ripened rays of autumn sun
which shine on cobwebs newly spun
from tree to shrub to roadside hedge
the ripened rays of autumn sun
across the quivering water’s edge.
Michael Edwards © April 2017
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Michael Edwards (
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- Comment from author about the poem: I do like trying out different forms - this one a triolet and might write more of these.
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Very good write Michael.
Thanks Goldfinch.
Interesting rhyme patterns, is it a particular form?
Yes - its called a triolet - never tried it before but I really enjoyed putting it together - will certainly do a few more.
Very beautiful. Feels nice to read. Appropriate for April?
Thanks Garry - I have to say I am not influenced by whats outside the door but rather what comes to me at the time - if its in my head - but then some say not a lot is...!
Heads are dangerous places to wander around in. I get very scared by mine sometimes!
The triolet form fits so well with the picture of mellow autumn - another gem to view and to read - thank you Michael.
Its a lovely form so elegant. Thanks Fay.
A fine write and picture M. I've been inspired to write some song-poems from certain pictures. I shall probably have some inspiration again sometime! I'm sure you're not wishing the year away with this for Autumn! lol.
Think of as looking back rather than looking forward - thanks for your kind comment.
Thanks MICHAEL ~ love triolets. In classical poetry the THREE R's are always important Rhyme ~ Rhythm ~ Repetition as in Villanelles etc. I don't mind you jumping two Seasons it is "poetic licence" and all four Seasons are mus~ical. Love the shadows in the painting ! BRIAN
yes this is one f my favourite forms whatever month of the year it is. Just completed a snow scene painting so there's no fixed time - after all some paint dinosaurs.
love this style Michael and the long shadows picture, sweet Rx3
Ah bless Willy - thanks for the comment.
Great write. I write in different forms all the time. It is good to try new stuff
Thanks and yes I have noticed the forms you use - what was yesterdays?
Welcome, just a little tree verse
Beautiful words, "ripened rays," "cobwebs newly spun," etc. A fresh scent of autumn, and a cool "quivering water's edge," bring the painting's suggestion of fall to the reader's eye. Loved it. - Phil A.
Thanks Phil - its nice when a poem falls into place as did this one.
Yes do Michael
As they are very good
Will do PH
The words you chose here are so great Michael. And, they paint the perfect picture, as well as your work here.
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