From the Sun to the Moon - FIBS.

Goldfinch60

The

Sun

Arose

Shone on us

And our day ahead

That day so full of joy and love

As my lover and I head towards our horizon

Knowing that our day together

Will be full of love

As our day

Leads to

The

Moon

  • Author: Goldfinch60 (Pseudonym) (Offline Offline)
  • Published: April 13th, 2017 01:40
  • Comment from author about the poem: This is written as a FIBS - fibonacci sequence - where the syllable count on each line is the total of the previous two lines and the reverse applies on the reverse FIBS.
  • Category: Unclassified
  • Views: 50
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Comments11

  • orchidee

    Good write, and those syllables thought out. Erm.... and then it rained?! No, Porchi, rain is not in this poem! heehee.

    • Goldfinch60

      It only rains over those eating pork pies.

    • Garry

      Very neatly done. Cleverly constructed and flows well. Great ideas.
      But, i mean really... A poem structured on the Fibonacci sequence. Jeez I thought I was wierd .

      • Goldfinch60

        Weirdness comes in all shapes, sizes and colours.
        Thanks Garry.

      • Michael Edwards

        Great piece - you have encouraged me - I've made a note of the form and will try it out sometime.

        • Goldfinch60

          Thank you Michael, go for it.
          It is a fairly well known construction that I have know about for a number of years, I have written about a dozen FIBS,

        • WriteBeLight

          Very romantic write Goldfinch 🙂

        • Goldfinch60

          Thank you WBL romance is never far away in our lives.

        • Tony36

          Great write

        • Goldfinch60

          Thank you Tony, much appreciated.

        • BRIAN & ANGELA

          Thanks BROTHER ~ great strucure and great content ~ linking the celestial bodies (Sun & Moon) with love ! As I sometimes croon to ANGELA "Night & Day you are the only one" I've tried a CARBONARA must also try a FIBONACCI ~ Thanks BRIAN

        • Goldfinch60

          Thank you Brian. FIBS are great fun to do but the supyllsble count can be frustrating sometimes.

        • Goldfinch60

          Thanks Ephraim, much appreciated.

        • P.H.Rose

          I have no idea what you
          Are saying in the comments
          Box but I love the poem..
          I'm afraid I'm illiterate and
          Have trouble with longer
          Words, my vocabulary is
          A bit basic but I get along.
          Spell check and predictive
          Text are my savour...

          • Goldfinch60

            Thank you for your comments and saying that you like the poem. The way the poem is written is just a form of putting the words in a certain way, it does not really matter as long as you have liked what is written.



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