IN A SHADY NOOK ~ I AM A BABBLING BROOK
I start out as a spring ~ high up in the Fells
I burbbled and gurgled my way through the soil
I burst into the air ~ enjoying the smells
I found a new freedom ~ that nothing could spoil
I wanted to scream ~ I'M A STREAM !
I burbbled and gurgled my way through the rocks
I was furnished with weed ~ with insects ~ with fish
I meandered my way and then waterfall shocks
I formed tranquil pools ~ consomme in a dish
I wanted to scream ~ OMG I'M A STREAM !
I reached down to the Plain ~ and started to shiver
I moved slower and lower a drink for the sheep
I widened ~ an Island ~ Now I was a river
I was sluggish and muggish and deep
I wanted to scream ~ I'm no longer a STREAM !
I am now a RIVER ~ deep wide and slow
I offer a place ~ for you to Canoe
I come to an incline and increase my flow
I tumble and rumble ~ cataractical glee
I fan out in Estury ~ NOW I AM THE SEA !
This last Stanza was added for my MPS Friend DIAMOND
because she asked ~ Ask and you will always receive !
Thanks for reading ~ comments welcome ~ Love BRIAN
-
Author:
BRIANSODES (Pseudonym) (
Offline) - Published: April 17th, 2017 05:54
- Comment from author about the poem: Our lives mirror Mountain Streams ! We start off as a tinkle (or should that be a TWINKLE ?) and bumble and gurgle our lives through Childhood and Teens ~ carefree as a Babbling Brook. We pick up lots of baggage (and experience) on the way. But then we reach the Plateau and it all changes ! A stream is totally irresponsible and always takes the easy way out with an unrestrained whoosh ! A river is more constrained ~ its banks are contained ~ its privacy is bridged ~ it becomes an ITEM for tourism ~ for transport ~ for irrigation and is manhandled into multiple use ! So it is with us ~ when our childhood and education days are over we are no longer a Starstruck Stream ~ we become a Responsible River and the Community has GREAT EXPECTATIONS ! Value and enjoy your YOUTH the grass is never greener on the other side of the age related fence ! Comments welcome ~ Babbling Love to All ~ BRIAN XOX
- Category: Nature
- Views: 54
- Users favorite of this poem: TheBrokenPrincess
Offline)
Comments12
Really good write. It's hard to make a teen understand that we don't want to grow up, but that's pretty hard to believe as we're treated like children but expected to act like adults! Cool poem x
Thanks for your comments AAMINA ~ It is paradox. As a Teen you have much more freedom and less responsibility than Hard Working Married Adults ! I know I did ! BUT in some respects ~ our Parents ~ our Tutors ~ Society do still regard us a kids and want to rein us in. As a TEEN you have some Freedom but not enough Liberty ~ Hugs BRIAN.
Very refreshing!
Thanks for your droll comment HONEY ~ I knew it would tick your box ! Refreshing Hugs ~ BRIAN
Good write, we all start as streams and go through our lives to eventually meander into life's oceans.
Thanks BROTHER for your observation. We all end up in the Ocean ~ one way or another ~ Yours BRIAN
SMILE - What a sense of achievement a rite of passage... well done BRIANSODES it smut be the time of year... Spring is here.
Thanks OLL ~ Thanks for your appreciation ~ Spring sure is in the AIR ~ Yours ~ BRIAN
Wonderful write a truly delightful read
Thanks TONY ~ All "good" poetry is a delight to read and recite ~ OK ! Thanks for your comment ~ BRIAN
Welcome
T think its 'trinkle' anyway I'm all at sea at my age - yes a refreshing poem.
Thanks MICHAEL ~ In my experience Streams do TINKLE especially over loose stones and pebbles ~ and it was to rhyme with TWINKLE (dans l'oeil de Mon Pere !). I my experience Streams only TWINKLE in the sunlight (and create Rainbows as in Niagara) but STARS twinkle every night ~ OK. In the end poetic critique all comes down to semantics ~ OK Yours BRIAN
Perhaps you're right I thinkle.
Good write.
Thanks "O" pleased you liked it ~ I try to make MPS more lively ! Yours BRIAN
Loved your poem! It does reflect how we grow up in society, doesn't it? A poem about growing up and branching out, which I am experiencing myself with my teen. It's hard to know where to draw the line of responsibility because, lets face it, we're both doing this for the first time! Great job! Hugs--Christina
Thanks CHRIS ~ Pleased you enjoyed the poem ~ I think the analogy from Spring to Stream to river to The Ocean o Corporate Society is a good one ! It's all new for the Stream as it is for us ! The stream has to keep flowing ~ just as we have to keep growing and keep learning as we grow and develop !Thank for caring ~ Babbling Hugs ~ BRIAN
Nice Flow Brian
Thanks WILLY ~ very droll ~ It sure does flow ~ right down to the deep blue sea ! BRIAN
Love this fresh look at streams and their journey,. I would be a tinckling rush of a stream if I had the choice.
Because you live in the Beautiful West Country of England FAY I know how much you understand and love nature. A tinkling fast flowing stream (as in the photo) is a wonderful simile for your bubbly character and dynamic poetry ~ Yours B.
Wow I really enjoyed this. My kind of perception of this is that things can change so quickly so enjoy things while it lasts.. you never know what is going to happen? Either way awesome 🙂
THANKS "D" pleased you enjoyed it ! Our lives are mirrored in many aspects of the natural World ~ animate and inanimate ~ they are excellent metaphors for Poetry. The secret of a happy and fulfilled life is coping with change ~ Hugs BRIAN
I really love this and have read it a couple times in the last ten minutes. It is simple yet complex
loved it !
THANKS PRINCESS ~ Pleased you liked it ~ It is an attempt to describe our "Journey Through Life" I guess you are stil in the Bubbly Stream stage ~ as illustrated in the photo ! I liked your first poem and have commented ~ The best Poems / Stories are simple and yet complex ! Yours BRIAN
To be able to comment and rate this poem, you must be registered. Register here or if you are already registered, login here.