Once upon a time I had a life,
Filled with children's laughter and learning.
Once upon a time I had a family,
And a fire inside me burning.
I was fun, slim and fit,
Full of joy and wit,
Straight white teeth and a lovely complexion,
No wrinkles, aching joints or infections.
To you pretty young things,
May I give some advice,
Live your lives to the full,
Don't waste them, think twice.
For tomorrow comes speeding along to your door,
Before you realise it, you'll be sixty-four.
Children all gone,aches, pains and night sweats,
Hobbling around and worry about debts,
Left all alone, good friends all passed on.
Just surviving, no life left and wishing you were gone.
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Author:
Flossy McGowan (Pseudonym) (
Offline) - Published: April 17th, 2017 17:19
- Comment from author about the poem: Written after being diagnosed with fibromyalgia, chronic fatigue and arthritis and told I\\\'d only get worse, never better.
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WELCOME DAISY ~ Thanks for your first poem ~ A lively take on ageing but with a pessimistic last verse ! The structure is good replete with Rhyme & Rhythm. Verses 1 & 2 describe how we all want to be in our Youth and Middle Age (up to 50 ?) and I enjoy that ~ it's the same for M & F we (want to) enjoy "Quality of Life" V 3. Sounds a Warning ~ Enjoy life while you are YOUNG ~ but ~ "Will you still need me will you still feed me ~ when I'm SIXTY FOUR ?" V 4. is very pessimistic ! Children must flee the nest ~ I always go back to my Mum's for Sunday Lunch ~ Friends must die some time (Scientists tell us the max age is now 125 !) My observation at Church where I meet a lot Seniors (65+) is that aches & pains do increase with age but many of the do have a good Quality of Life and they don't want to die ~ even though they know they have a place in Heaven. Of course people who are blind ~ crippled ~ very arthritic ~ have cancer etc ~ do have a lower quality of life and some long for the Lord to call them HOME ! My Parents are contented and retired and seek to balance the QUALItY & QUANTITY of LIFE ~ I think that is the secret ! Please check my poems ~ Yours BRIAN (UK)
Thank you for your very detailed reply. I'm afraid most of my poems are pessimistic and depressing, it's how I hope with life....get it out on paper! I shall take a look at your poems tomorrow, I look forward to that. Thanks again.
Well written and expressed, Welcome to my poetic side
Thank you Tony.
Welcome
Good write and good advice to the youngsters, enjoy every moment of your life.
Welcome to MPS.
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