WriteBeLight

Back And Forth

This work is the best,

That I’ve ever done.

Oh, no it’s not.

Revise it again.

 

But, I like it the way,

Down on paper, it is.

You’re so very wrong,

It’s flat without fizz.

 

Oh, why do you have to,

Be so very harsh?

There’s room for improvement,

So, get off your arse!

 

I appreciate you,

Wanting me to be better.

You’re welcome, for that,

I’m just a go-getter.

 

Ok, you win.

There’ll be no shortcuts.

No more excuses,

Ifs, ands or buts.

 

Now, that’s the spirit,

I’m so proud of you.

Again, I appreciate that,

Here’s my heartfelt, Thank You!

Comments8

  • orchidee

    We could be there for ever, re-writing, if we spend too long on a poem! A fine write WBL.

    • WriteBeLight

      That is right orchidee. Sometimes you just have to let it go 🙂

    • Corey

      Why does this seem so familiar? 🙂 I love poetry, period, but even more so when its relatable. Great piece, WriteBeLight!

      • WriteBeLight

        Thanks Corey for stopping by! Glad you liked the poem and so nice to hear from you 🙂

      • swingline

        Ha ha , love the humor here . And the push /pull dedication to doing the best of our ability . Sometimes even our best does not please but you can't fault lack of effort .

        • WriteBeLight

          Thanks swingline. Sometimes I just do not have the energy. But, have to move forward and try! 🙂

        • kevin browne

          there are no 'if's' and 'buts' about your writing. its great x

          • WriteBeLight

            Hi there Kevin! Thanks so very much!

            • kevin browne

              you're very welcome x

            • Augustus

              Sounds like that that little devil on your shoulder.

              • WriteBeLight

                So true. It is always there taunting me 🙂 I just flick it off... ha ha Thanks Augustus!

              • P.H.Rose

                Very good WBL
                Very good

                • WriteBeLight

                  So kind of you P.H.! Thanks!

                • Michael Edwards

                  I have a pending file of poems in which I keep work for review. They move on to the permanent file when I am happy I can't do much more. Comes a time when its publish or be damned. Love it WBL

                  • WriteBeLight

                    Thanks Michael. I am sure it is easier than trying to tweak a painting! 🙂 But, yours are always perfection!

                    • Michael Edwards

                      Aw shucks - I think I'm in love.

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                    • Goldfinch60

                      Good write, we must all be trying to get better and it is the trying that is the important thing because if we reach perfection where do we go.

                      • WriteBeLight

                        I know Goldfinch. Discipline is tough sometimes. But, we really have to kick our selves in the behind some days. Thanks so much for your comment!



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