Michael Edwards

A FEW COUPLETS

 

 

A FEW COUPLETS

 

                                                                                                                  

He swam in freedoms liberty

and drowned in abject misery.

 

 

The milk cart rattled down the way

as opening shutters welcomed day.

 

 

The braziers coals glowed red with heat

to the rise and fall of the bellows beat.

 

 

As worms are severed by the spade

   he cast aside the friendships made. 

 

 

 

                                                                       

 

 

 

 

 

 

Michael Edwards © June 2017

Comments13

  • kevin browne

    that's so sweet Michael Edwards. well done on putting these wonderful words together.

    • Michael Edwards

      They're fun and can be fitted in when time is short or when a random thought comes to mind - thanks for looking in Kevin.

    • Goldfinch60

      Good couplets Michael.

    • orchidee

      Fine writes and pic M.

      • Michael Edwards

        Cheers O - shouldn't you be polishing your shield?

        • orchidee

          Oh yes! A 1066 reunion every October! hehe.

        • burning-embers

          These are really good. Thought provoking. Did you reveal them 'as is' because you've had them a while and couldn't find a use for them (Sorry i'm a cheeky buggah) or are you just red hot at thinking these sizzlers up. When i get a little pearl like these i want to encapsulate it in a bigger piece you see.

          • Michael Edwards

            A bit of both really. Most come to me from time to time and when they do it is hard to weave them into something larger so that the rest of the poem is up to the same standard and doesn\'t detract from them. The ones above, apart from the milk cart one, were all purpose written.

            Having said that I do write down loads of related ideas which come to me and then play around with them until a specific theme develops which I can weave into a poem. Often there are some lines which I can\'t use and if good enough I try to develop them into one-liners or couplets etc. This was how the milk cart one came about.

            • burning-embers

              I'm reticent about discarding anything i write. After spending time and getting stuck/the block i file it away and have a look another day. Periodically i go thru all my scraps and see what happens in my mind. I recently posted a 4 line piece which was quite powerful but it was in fact originally the first verse of a longer piece which had become drivvel. Interesting to talk about how we manufacture these pieces.

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            • BRIAN & ANGELA

              Good Morning Michael | don't fret about your Pole Position | I have been Cock of the Walk for a day. Form rhyming couplets do stand alone !

              When all is said and done
              The war of words is WON !

              Thanks for the MODEL (photo ?) it is OUR Adult Education College in Trumpton. You will like my HOT AIR BALLOON Painting & Poem today - please check - BRIAN

              • Michael Edwards

                Nice one Brian - yup photo of a rustic sculpture made from found wood and painted with acrylic.

              • FredPeyer

                Michael I love these couplets. Too bad that hardly any of today's youth even know what bellows mean or do. And the milk cart you can forget completely.
                The last one is the one that intrigues me the most.

                • Michael Edwards

                  They are great and would love to see others publishing a few of them - as you say they can be so enigmatic and intriguing.

                  • FredPeyer

                    Michael, hope you did not misunderstand about the milk cart. I did not mean to forget the poem, I meant that in today's time hardly anybody remembers milk carts anymore. At least not here in the US.

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                  • Fay Slimm.

                    Excellent wisdom-filled couplets and great sculpture Michael - you have many talents my friend.

                  • Louis Gibbs

                    Classic couplets, Michael! Well done. Thanks for sharing.

                  • ShannonXx

                    A wonderful flow, really enjoyed reading

                  • malubotelho

                    I like the couplets so much. I have more but don't publish them here but on Instagram to go with pictures. I'm not doing much pictures lately. The one with the milk cart took me to a place like from a movie scene about a French bakery and milk man delivering his milk before the city is awake.

                    • Michael Edwards

                      But you must publish them here - go on I dare you. We do still have a milkman in our village but they're a dying breed - sad to say.

                      • malubotelho

                        I will, for sure. When I lived in Australia 32 years ago we had a milk man. Was very cute to find the bottle outdid the door every morning.

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                      • Candlewitch

                        dear Michael,

                        I very much liked this fine piece so much that I couldn't find favorite lines to quote back at you! loved it all... I'm in a dark mood today.

                        *hugs, Cat
                        ever, eddy

                      • Heather T

                        Very smart couplets, sir. Usually if I think one up, it's on the fly and something silly for the children

                        • Michael Edwards

                          I love 'silly' - if you have some pop them on here - thanks Heather.

                        • sue.evans

                          I like couplets - so much said in such short verse. Love it.



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