A FEW COUPLETS
He swam in freedoms liberty
and drowned in abject misery.
The milk cart rattled down the way
as opening shutters welcomed day.
The braziers coals glowed red with heat
to the rise and fall of the bellows beat.
As worms are severed by the spade
he cast aside the friendships made.
Michael Edwards © June 2017
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that's so sweet Michael Edwards. well done on putting these wonderful words together.
They're fun and can be fitted in when time is short or when a random thought comes to mind - thanks for looking in Kevin.
Good couplets Michael.
Thanks G
Fine writes and pic M.
Cheers O - shouldn't you be polishing your shield?
Oh yes! A 1066 reunion every October! hehe.
These are really good. Thought provoking. Did you reveal them 'as is' because you've had them a while and couldn't find a use for them (Sorry i'm a cheeky buggah) or are you just red hot at thinking these sizzlers up. When i get a little pearl like these i want to encapsulate it in a bigger piece you see.
A bit of both really. Most come to me from time to time and when they do it is hard to weave them into something larger so that the rest of the poem is up to the same standard and doesn\'t detract from them. The ones above, apart from the milk cart one, were all purpose written.
Having said that I do write down loads of related ideas which come to me and then play around with them until a specific theme develops which I can weave into a poem. Often there are some lines which I can\'t use and if good enough I try to develop them into one-liners or couplets etc. This was how the milk cart one came about.
I'm reticent about discarding anything i write. After spending time and getting stuck/the block i file it away and have a look another day. Periodically i go thru all my scraps and see what happens in my mind. I recently posted a 4 line piece which was quite powerful but it was in fact originally the first verse of a longer piece which had become drivvel. Interesting to talk about how we manufacture these pieces.
Might post a list of ideas and then the next day publish the poem that develops but may be a while as I've nothing on the drawing board at the moment apart from a load of shorties.
Similar for me today so i threw together some nonsense stuff and published. Without meaning to sound cheeky, do you ever write nonsense? (I'm laughing here cos that's such a bad question).
Yes and I've published a few here - will look it up and let you know the titles
Good Morning Michael | don't fret about your Pole Position | I have been Cock of the Walk for a day. Form rhyming couplets do stand alone !
When all is said and done
The war of words is WON !
Thanks for the MODEL (photo ?) it is OUR Adult Education College in Trumpton. You will like my HOT AIR BALLOON Painting & Poem today - please check - BRIAN
Nice one Brian - yup photo of a rustic sculpture made from found wood and painted with acrylic.
Michael I love these couplets. Too bad that hardly any of today's youth even know what bellows mean or do. And the milk cart you can forget completely.
The last one is the one that intrigues me the most.
They are great and would love to see others publishing a few of them - as you say they can be so enigmatic and intriguing.
Michael, hope you did not misunderstand about the milk cart. I did not mean to forget the poem, I meant that in today's time hardly anybody remembers milk carts anymore. At least not here in the US.
I knew what you meant Fred - in fact I used to earn pocket money as a lad helping our local milkman, Joe, with his deliveries on a horse and cart. As an aside I am taller than my parents and so was Joe so as you can guess my Mum often got her leg pulled.....!
This is too funny! Here we say: Must have been the mail-man!
Excellent wisdom-filled couplets and great sculpture Michael - you have many talents my friend.
Classic couplets, Michael! Well done. Thanks for sharing.
Thanks for lookin'
A wonderful flow, really enjoyed reading
Thank you Shannon
I like the couplets so much. I have more but don't publish them here but on Instagram to go with pictures. I'm not doing much pictures lately. The one with the milk cart took me to a place like from a movie scene about a French bakery and milk man delivering his milk before the city is awake.
But you must publish them here - go on I dare you. We do still have a milkman in our village but they're a dying breed - sad to say.
I will, for sure. When I lived in Australia 32 years ago we had a milk man. Was very cute to find the bottle outdid the door every morning.
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Very smart couplets, sir. Usually if I think one up, it's on the fly and something silly for the children
I love 'silly' - if you have some pop them on here - thanks Heather.
I like couplets - so much said in such short verse. Love it.
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