SHE SLEPT IN RESTFUL PEACE
As seaweed on a sunken ship
so she was held in loves firm grip
and through to early morning light
she slept in restful peace that night.
For every golden moment held
a love so strong unparalleled
her soul a shade of virgin white
she slept in restful peace that night.
Beneath the sloping roof she lay
no seeds of doubt, no shades of grey
in innocence without foresight
she slept in restful peace that night.
And as she slept on bed of straw
she never heard the closing door
quite unaware he’d taken flight
she slept in restful peace that night.
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Author:
Michael Edwards (
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- Comment from author about the poem: A couple of days ago someone posted a Kyrielle and I said I would have a go having never written in this form before so here it is. Plus a watercolour.
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Comments9
Well you succeeded. Good write and a good painting.
Thanks - yes it worked out okay
Good write and pic M. I'm sure that sometime a pic of yours may inspire me to write a poem.
Look forward to reading it - the picture is of my home town - Market Harborough
Cooeee M - first UK poet of the day - or nearly every day?!
Yes I rise before first light most days - 4.30 this morning and one of the first jobs is to sort the days posting. Anyway signing off for a while - gardening to be done and might have a go at painting a rain scene along the lines of Goldies picture posted today.
Michael this is a beautiful poem, you succeeded admirably. And the watercolor 'ain't bad either'!
And btw, the 'he'd taken flight' fits perfectly as far as I am concerned.
Thanks Fred and for the reassurance over 'taken flight'.
A beauty, this one, Michael! The repeating last line is very effective, and the closing phrase ties it up with a punch.
Yes I do quite like this form - but a bit restricting - anyway might try it again soon. Pleased you liked it.
I have a weeping heart after reading this. So beautiful. So romantic. When is he coming back? I hope before she wakes up
You never know - he might return with egg on his face - now there's a thought - thanks for your kind comment.
I feel sleepy! 🙂 Nice Michael.
Up early as usual, gardening rained and a big lunch so I also feel a somewhat drowsy - at least I'll sleep tonight. Thanks for looking in.
Gone but not forgotten ! loved the Poem and the complementary Picture. I like QUATRAINS and a KIRIELLE way to present them ! Also like Rhyming Couplets so I like your choice of rhyme pattern aabB ccbB ddbB eebB ! You have made each line 4 the same hence B ~ it can vary. For instance you could vary word four (RESTFUL) in each line etc. Thanks for daring & sharing ~ BRIAN
Thanks Brian - always appreciate you useful suggestions and advice so - yes - might try a different word to Restful.
Dam it! You made me take a break for too long. But that was an enjoyable moment, thank you
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