A FEW COUPLETS (3)

Michael Edwards

 

 

A FEW MORE COUPLETS (3)

 

 

In life he never knew her name

in death her name in marble cast.

 

His hopes and dreams foregone, deposed,

for him the gates of youth were closed.

 

A wounded slave to troubled life

a lesion never cuts the knife.

 

 

 

 

  • Author: Michael Edwards (Offline Offline)
  • Published: August 7th, 2017 00:02
  • Category: Unclassified
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  • Heather T

    Well done, Michael. Sad three couplets! The middle is my favorite. But surely even if youth is gone, there's still room for new hopes and dreams!

    • Michael Edwards

      Could be Heather - but other opportunities may arise but not the opportunities of youth? That\'s what I love about couplets - they should, in my humble opinion, be enigmatic leaving the reader intrigued, asking questions , wondering, dangling. I do like a poem that challenges the reader.

    • FredPeyer

      Michael, all three are good. Like the first one best.

    • orchidee

      Good writes and pic Michael. Yep, first UK poet of the day again!

      • Michael Edwards

        I was first on the battlefield too. Didn't do me any good though!!

      • BRIAN & ANGELA

        Thanks MICHAEL ~ LOVE CYMING RHOUPLETS ~ FOR ME THE ULTIMATE ~ Frugal Poetic Form ~ One Liners (nomally) are non~rhyming. To make COUPLET ONE into Rhyming Couplet (you did not say they rhymed !) I would suggest revision to:

        In LIFE he never knew her name
        In DEATH she Marble Cast became !

        Now polished and with outstretched hand
        She acts as an Umbrella Stand
        (This couplet is optional ~ of course !)

        Yours BRIAN the FUSSY !

        • Michael Edwards

          I quite liked No1 as is written but it could easily be a one-liner with, say, a semi-colon between. Also very much like your rhyming version. Thanks Brian for your ever helpful comments.

        • Michael Edwards

        • Fay Slimm.

          An intriguing trio of couplets here Michael - can relate to the middle one as youth is so fleeting. Lovely watercolour too.

        • Goldfinch60

          Three good emotive couplets.

        • Louis Gibbs

          I, too, like the middle one a lot, but something about the last one really intrigues me. I'd have to say it is my favorite of the three. Kudos, Michael! Love the painting too.

        • WriteBeLight

          Very interesting!

        • malubotelho

          The best for me is the second. Not cê writing Michael. And your painting is superb.



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