EMERGING – A TANKA
A deserted path
Emerging from the wild wood
Bright red glowing cheeks
Long hair flowing free and loose
He followed in her footsteps.
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Author:
Michael Edwards (
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It's difficult to gauge just how good a poem like this is. With a syllable barrier, it's hard to put yourself into the mind of the author. It makes the audience wonder why the author chose the words that he/she used. I like Japanese poetry styles, and this is nice. Good one.
Thank you Nicholas - as for what was in my mind I envisaged a girl emerging from the wood a bit dishevelled followed by her boyfriend a little while later - after they didn't want to be seen together. However I must add that my poems are a bit like my abstracts - I like to leave the reader to interpret what they see/read - make the viewer/reader work - a degree of enigma makes a better result imho.
You're right in that regard. It can openly be a double-edged sword at times. For instance, if an abstract is too complex people just can't piece it together. It's like chaos on paper, and I really enjoy writing pieces like that. The thought process is indeed interesting, keep it up sir.
Bon Giorno MICHAEL ~ Grazie for a full Tanka (57577) !
Q. Where do you find MANGOES ?
A. Where WOMANGOES !
I invite you for breakfast ~ a bowl of Ministrone
Crusty bread and a glass of Chianti Classico
Tu Amico Poetico ~ BRIAN
Cheers Brian - I'll take you up on the breakfast. And I love mangoes!! Never tried a womango.
A fine write and pic there, first poet of the day!
Yup - made it today even if a few minutes late.
Good write Michael, was it the path less travelled that you followed.
It was and I lost a shoe!!
Lovely little piece and a fine sketch, Michael. Enjoyed.
thanks Frank
A fine write
Bless you S - thanks for looking in.
It's the end of the world - well almost! Was you 3 minutes late?! hehehe.
Possibly - but I did trip on a match stick
Ahh, that took the 3 minutes to recover from it?!
I was waiting for the fire brigade
Another lovely written scene that left a trace on my heart. So beautiful. Do you have a painting with the couple coming out from the trees? I would love to see it.
Thank you m - no I don't - wish I did and little time to paint one at the present - currently doing one for a client which will take some time to finish.
Brings up a lot of images of a beautiful time. Thanks Michael.
As long as their Mums don't find out. 🙂
Ha Ha!
Michael, tis so good, had to make it a favorite!
Thanks so much Fred - I feel honoured
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