Michael Edwards




A deserted path

Emerging from the wild wood

Bright red glowing cheeks

Long hair flowing free and loose

He followed in her footsteps.




  • Author: Michael Edwards (Offline Offline)
  • Published: August 10th, 2017 00:03
  • Category: Unclassified
  • Views: 45
  • User favorite of this poem: FredPeyer.


  • Nicholas Browning

    It's difficult to gauge just how good a poem like this is. With a syllable barrier, it's hard to put yourself into the mind of the author. It makes the audience wonder why the author chose the words that he/she used. I like Japanese poetry styles, and this is nice. Good one.

    • Michael Edwards

      Thank you Nicholas - as for what was in my mind I envisaged a girl emerging from the wood a bit dishevelled followed by her boyfriend a little while later - after they didn't want to be seen together. However I must add that my poems are a bit like my abstracts - I like to leave the reader to interpret what they see/read - make the viewer/reader work - a degree of enigma makes a better result imho.

      • Nicholas Browning

        You're right in that regard. It can openly be a double-edged sword at times. For instance, if an abstract is too complex people just can't piece it together. It's like chaos on paper, and I really enjoy writing pieces like that. The thought process is indeed interesting, keep it up sir.

      • BRIAN & ANGELA

        Bon Giorno MICHAEL ~ Grazie for a full Tanka (57577) !

        Q. Where do you find MANGOES ?
        A. Where WOMANGOES !

        I invite you for breakfast ~ a bowl of Ministrone
        Crusty bread and a glass of Chianti Classico

        Tu Amico Poetico ~ BRIAN

        • Michael Edwards

          Cheers Brian - I'll take you up on the breakfast. And I love mangoes!! Never tried a womango.

        • orchidee

          A fine write and pic there, first poet of the day!

          • Michael Edwards

            Yup - made it today even if a few minutes late.

          • Goldfinch60

            Good write Michael, was it the path less travelled that you followed.

          • Frank Prem

            Lovely little piece and a fine sketch, Michael. Enjoyed.

          • ShannonXx

            A fine write

            • Michael Edwards

              Bless you S - thanks for looking in.

            • orchidee

              It's the end of the world - well almost! Was you 3 minutes late?! hehehe.

              • Michael Edwards

                Possibly - but I did trip on a match stick

                • orchidee

                  Ahh, that took the 3 minutes to recover from it?!

                • 1 more comment

                • malubotelho

                  Another lovely written scene that left a trace on my heart. So beautiful. Do you have a painting with the couple coming out from the trees? I would love to see it.

                  • Michael Edwards

                    Thank you m - no I don't - wish I did and little time to paint one at the present - currently doing one for a client which will take some time to finish.

                  • WriteBeLight

                    Brings up a lot of images of a beautiful time. Thanks Michael.

                  • FredPeyer

                    Michael, tis so good, had to make it a favorite!

                    • Michael Edwards

                      Thanks so much Fred - I feel honoured

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