Enticing.
From the first finger of hazy light
fresh rays from
day's entrance shatter dark chains
impeccably.
Breeze stirs black dregs to a finish
as streaks of
morning beget break of new dawn
impressively.
Unsullied azure displays an astute
need for space
by removing glimpsed bits of grey
imposingly.
Sleep flits away, giving me chance
for early
attempt to pen nature's clear gifts
impassively.
Caught in night's shawl is no place
to be when
sun's call entices my quill outdoors
impellingly.
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Author:
Fay Slimm. (
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Comments6
In fact lots of lovely lines - love nights shawl and the idea of day's entrance - great read.
Knew you appreciate some of the metaphor I used in this piece Michael. Glad you enjoyed the read.
Challenging in its fullness to comprehend completely upon initial review, but appreciation grows with each read. You have a gift, Fay ... thanks for sharing it!
So grateful you feel that way Louis about my efforts at poetry - glad too that you got more out of your second read of Enticing.
After reading your poem, Fay, I now look at each dawn in a different way. Beautifully written!
Ah -- so kind of you to say that Fred - wishing you dawns full of promise my friend.
Thanks for sharing FAY ~ loved it !
Impeccable
Impressive
Imposing
Impassive
Impelling
Your Poetry & You are
summed up in those five
words ! Oh and you are also
ENTICING !
Your as always ~ BRIAN
Ooooh - - my blushing thanks to you Brian - so pleased you enjoyed the read.
Yes Fay, you are a truly blessing for us readers. Thank you 😊
Beautiful write and opening to my day in the UK. Thank you Fay.
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