Fay Slimm

Enticing.

 

Enticing.

 

From the first finger of hazy light
fresh rays from
day's entrance shatter dark chains

impeccably.

 

Breeze stirs black dregs to a finish
as streaks of
morning beget break of new dawn

impressively.

 

Unsullied azure displays an astute
need for space 
by removing glimpsed bits of grey

imposingly.

 

Sleep flits away, giving me chance
for early  
attempt to pen nature's clear gifts

impassively.

 

Caught in night's shawl is no place
to be when
sun's call entices my quill outdoors

impellingly.

 

Comments9

  • Michael Edwards

    In fact lots of lovely lines - love nights shawl and the idea of day's entrance - great read.

    • Fay Slimm

      Knew you appreciate some of the metaphor I used in this piece Michael. Glad you enjoyed the read.

    • Martina Lynch

      This is the place where I like to write too but sadly I Rise at 5.30 to work so I do write late into the night.....burning candles at both ends! Lovely piece Fay!

      • Fay Slimm

        Ooooh - I can relate to having to rise early for work dear Martina - - time demands we sometimes use the back- end to do our writing - - nights have their inspiration but the oh how tired we feel the next day burning the midnight oil eh ? Thank you for your generous time in reading and commenting my work.

      • Kat

        Intriguing read!

        • Fay Slimm

          Bless you dear Kat - I know you like to read nature and feel same as I do that it inspires our writing.

          • Kat

            Yes, it does! Thank you!

          • Louis Gibbs

            Challenging in its fullness to comprehend completely upon initial review, but appreciation grows with each read. You have a gift, Fay ... thanks for sharing it!

            • Fay Slimm

              So grateful you feel that way Louis about my efforts at poetry - glad too that you got more out of your second read of Enticing.

            • Santita

              Gorgeous piece, Fay. I pictured you and your pen enjoying the sunrise.

            • FredPeyer

              After reading your poem, Fay, I now look at each dawn in a different way. Beautifully written!

              • Fay Slimm

                Ah -- so kind of you to say that Fred - wishing you dawns full of promise my friend.

              • BRIANSODES

                Thanks for sharing FAY ~ loved it !

                Impeccable
                Impressive
                Imposing
                Impassive
                Impelling

                Your Poetry & You are
                summed up in those five
                words ! Oh and you are also
                ENTICING !

                Your as always ~ BRIAN

                • Fay Slimm

                  Ooooh - - my blushing thanks to you Brian - so pleased you enjoyed the read.

                • malubotelho

                  Yes Fay, you are a truly blessing for us readers. Thank you 😊

                • Goldfinch60

                  Beautiful write and opening to my day in the UK. Thank you Fay.



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