CLOSE OF DAY
Day slowly
slipped over
the hills.
Acrid smoke
from
smouldering fires
controlled the air.
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Author:
Michael Edwards (
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- Comment from author about the poem: Decided to post a Septolet today _____The Septolet is a poem consisting of seven lines containing fourteen words with a break in between the two parts. Both parts deal with the same thought and create a picture
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Michael, I just posted mine. Figured I let you be first. Don't forget, that 0.00 time is 7pm Saturday here in Hawaii.
Great septolet! Love how you wrote about the smoke in the air!
Thanks Fred - will take a look at your posting straight away.
Don't know if you read my comment on Santita's septolet. Sorry Michael, but you did come in second! 🙂
No problems with that - Santita is writing some great stuff.
I was just kidding around, It is getting late here. There is no contest, you are both incredible writers!
A fine poem and pic about the END of the day, being the first UK poet at the START of the day!
I do love contrasts Orchi
Good write Michael and thank you for showing me a new style of poetry.
Thanks Andy - yes this is quite a good form - I'm sure I'll return to it from time to time.
Have you smelt wood smoke at twilight
Who hath heard the birch log burning
Who is quick to read the noises of the night ?
Let him follow with the ohers
Where the Young Mens feet are turning
To the Camps of known desire
And proved delight !
More Arizona ~ than rural Leicestershire Thanks for sharing
Great SEPTOLETIC structure ~ Love classical forms !
Yours BRIAN
Great bit of verse Brian. Yes possibly more States than UK. I do enjoy the more classical forms - they impose a discipline and as I said somewhere else: a bit like learning drawing skills before progressing to more loose and even abstract painting (ie to free verse etc).
Wow Mike, I AM impressed. Short, yet sweet and directly to the point! I like that. It doesn't have to be this long, drawn out type of poem. I like your style, sense of awareness and, nicely done!!!
Wow - thank you Edward - such great praise and it's so much appreciated.
Excellent image... I do like the smell of burning wood in the mountains of Puerto Rico. Loved it. Let me take a whack at it.
Whack away rr - thanks for commenting.
Brilliant and another lesson on poems learned. ..love it 😊
Thanks Jooles - just written a few Essence poems which I'll post later in the week.
No idea what they are....can't wait
A definition: a short, structured form of two-lines, six syllables each with an end rhyme and internal rhyme.
Actually I find them one of the most difficult forms so shan't be writing many more methinks. .
Sound difficult but interesting
Thanks for the lesson about writing it. I have a lot to learn and am up to it. Beautiful writing.
It takes me back to the small village I was born, so peaceful.
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