He was her beginning, her first ride to the stars.
He traveled her to unexplored roads and assisted her new feelings in subtly convincing ways.
He drank from her fountain and baptized her with his sacred water. He blossomed flowers from her lips
planting words into her ears and teaching her how to praise her own desires.
He gave her freedom and courage to ask for her wanting.
He made her anxious for him to return home.
He lifted the veil of innocence from her face but crowned her head as his queen for now she was his woman and he was her man.
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Author:
Malu (Pseudonym) (
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Thanks Outback.
Flowing and uplifting - a great read.
Thank you so much Michael. Lovely words.
Wonderful MALU ~ Sometimes we mere men can lift a Lady onto Higher Ground. This poem is a Sonnet to that ~ thank you ! By linguistic skill and metaphor it is Sensual but NOT erotic ~ titillating but NOT pornographic ~ experiential but NOT clinical ~ BEAUTIFUL ! Love the visual it is a perfect compliment to a perfect poem ! Sunday Hugs ~ BRIAN
Wow! Thanks brother Brian. I'm getting ready to go reading my friends poems that includes yours. A lovely Sunday for you.
You write beautifully malubotelho. What a fine lover your subject has, how could she do anything but love him. A real smoothie - class.
Thanks b.e. I'm getting some of your smoothness. Hehe 😂
Just joking. Yes, I like this one. The way it should be. Erotic but not porn. Sweet but not too mellow.
This is written so metaphorically. Has a twist of fantasy and if I may, mythological overtones. Greatly written. Don't worry about having a broad vocabulary, what's needed is a message. Lincoln's Gettysburg address had 272 words in simple vocabulary, but it's considered the greatest speech in history. Edward Everett delivered a two-hour speech at the Gettysburg National Cemetery — but most people only remember the two-minute speech given by President Abraham Lincoln. Moral of the story, keep writing and don't worry about the vocabulary. This will seep in your writing slowly for surely. Be blessed.
Thanks Rodriguez. My language is Portuguese and I have many writings in it. English I'm still learn but I love to write and since I've found this site I'm being bold publishing my writings here. I write in simple words and need to use the dictionary many times to read others poem. I'm learning slowly.
Thank you so much for your comments and I will go check your poems too. Have a great day.
A sensual feel to each well written line in this piece of gently erotica dear Malu - - I love the metaphor you use to get the intimate theme across. Good read.
Thanks Fay. I appreciate your comments.
Cool , romantic a little erotic nicely done
Thanks a lot for your words, I appreciate it.
Very good flowing write, a life of love together beckons.
Thank you so much Goldfinch. Thanks for your visit
Absolutely love this poem! Don't even think about your imagined "language limitations". Since English is not my first language either, I used to worry about that, but not anymore! You are good!
Thank you so much Fred. I'm trying and I know I'm a good writer but it is only my vocabulary that is short and I can not deny it. But I'm better than the average American people. I just need to keep reading and writing and I will be fine.
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