THE LETTER
On plastered walls where shoulders lean
she leant
she cried.
By kindled fire that slowly warmed
her hand
still cold.
On oaken chair by ink stained desk
she sat
she thought.
And on the woven writing pad
she wrote
to him.
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Author:
Michael Edwards (
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Michael, you have the gift to bring a scene to life with only a few words. I can see that woman, I can see the room, and I can feel the hurt and the hope.
Thanks Fred - I was quite smugly pleased with this little write.
You should be more than pleased, you should be ecstatic. And I am really serious here, no kidding this time!
Beautifully touching write Michael.
Great picture.
Thank you Andy
Picture = Dendritic Forest ( an experimental piece).
The experiment worked.
A fine write and pic again M. Did it take her 14 minutes into the day to write the letter, then you wrote this poem?! heehee.
Woke up early so posted it late to make up for it. Seriously though I didn't realise I'd posted an earlier version and not the finalised version so had to edit it a bit - s**t happens as they say. Who are they?
It's the unknown 'they', of 'them' and 'us'. Well, stand back - in case any of it hits the fan, as they also say!
So 'they' have fans - lucky them (sorry - they) - more than us struggling poets have Orchi.
Thanks MICHAEL ~ Love the 822 format ~ the cadence in the longer line (8) adds power & poignancy to abruptness of the 2 x 2 lines. Again this form underlines the importance of basing rhythm on syllabus count ! "The moving hand doth write .......! " is always an excellent theme for an excellent Poem. Love dendritic painting and (as your title suggests) it always branches out ! Yours BRIAN Please visit my Pyramid ~ Thanks B.
Thanks for the encouragement Brian - I was pleased it works as well as it does.
An enchanting piece, nicely presented visually. Who could ask for more? This one nails it, Michael!
Thanks so much Louis
Wow! Michael, this is awesome. You surpassed yourself with this one. And the painting is so beautiful. I love it 😍
Thank you so much - it started out a simple idea and took on shape as it developed - certainly one I enjoyed immensely in the writing.
High art well done
Thank you w and so pleased you favourited (new word) it
This feels like mindfulness. My imagination savoured each new item as you created them. I was left wondering the letters content. Truly excellent, enthralling and entertaining.
Your kind words are so encouraging - thank you.
Hi, Early bird,
What happened to her?
I really want to know what she will write? Please let me know tomorrow.
I think it was a poem - but only he knows !! - and her of course !!
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