PYRAMIDS AT GIZA ~ BEDOUINS WITH CAMELS
I
see
Pyramids
along ~ the Nile
Camels make me smile
thinking of you ~ all the while
You belong to me ~ You belong to me
Snuggled by by me in my tent where our so
blissful nights are spent ! Never mind the crocodile
enjoy the Pyramids employ the Pyamids ~ along the NILE !
Thanks for visiting ~ comments welcome ~ Love BRIAN XOX
The Centered Pyramid is the simplest form of Form Poem
the only difficulty is getting the overlap in each successive
line the same. Poets must have an extensive vocabulary !
Also a simple Pyramidal Poem ~ must be about PYRAMIDS
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Author:
BRIANSODES (Pseudonym) (
Offline) - Published: August 24th, 2017 02:18
- Comment from author about the poem: My Grandma told me that in the 1950's there was a lovely Love Song called "See the Pyramids along the NILE" ! They don't write them like that this Century ! The Pyramids @ Giza were built to last for ever ~ like Stonehenge (UK) ~ so whenever you visit ~ they will still be there ! Sun kissed love to ALL ~ BRIAN XOX
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Comments10
Sounds like fun to be had by the pyramids. I love it ❤😄
Thanks pleased you loved it ! Interesting comment MANDI ~ All the Ladies I know who have climbed the Pyramids ~ after sunset or before sunrise because of the heat of the day ~ have found them very very sensual~ say no more ~ Hugs in Giza ~ BRIAN
Great structure written to perfection.
Well like you MICHAEL ~ I am a perfectionist ~ Perfect Picture ~ Poem ~ Poetry ! Thanks for your approval ~ BRIAN The Geezer from Giza !
Good write.
HI ANDY ~ Pleased you enjoyed it ~ BRIAN
A fine shaped write Brian.
Thanks STEVE ~ Pleased you enjoyed the shape & the poem !
My object in this muse escape
Is to make the \"Poem fit the Shape\"
and not one letter will escape
!\'ll trap each letter in the shape
and not one letter will escape
my DESIGNATED ~ ORCHESTRATED
often HATED ~ CASTIGATED SHAPE !
(Apologies to G & S)
Yours BRIAN ~ The Geezer from Giza
We - a couple of us - are getting obsessed with syllables! But they're needed!
Thanks ANDY ~ Yoiur syllabically BRIAN
I love a Girl who is monosyllabic
Cool and cuddly as a Rabbit
SYLLABLE I love ~ O you can Guess
Is never NO and always YES !
I sit atop a pyramid and yell, For all the world must know, Unless I'm Andy in disguise - Cooeeee, Steven here!
HI STEVE ~ I'll give you a reprieve ~ early Alzheimers I believe
On my wall written BIG & HANDY
Is note ~ Both my friends are DANDY
ORCHIDEE ~ A STEVE ~ A STEVE is he
And my friend GOLDFINCH ~ is ANDY !
You couldn't be mistaken for a better (ANDY)MAN !
Mea culpa ~ again ~ BRIAN from Auld Lang Syan !
Well done Brian!
Thanks HONEY ~ For me POETRY is always a challenge ~ always experiential ~ and like all Men of my age (33) always striving for perfection and never quite achieving it ! Poetic Hugs ~ BRIAN
Like the feeling on your writing. Another place I get to visit. I visit it with a mantra non meditation. Well, I've tried but never succeeded yet.
OBRIGADO ~ MALU ~ All these exotic places (Paris ~ Table Mountain (SA) ~ Taj Mahal (India) and Egypt are closer to the UK than the USA therefor more accessible ! However with the development of \\\"Interactive TV\\\" you will be able to touch and climb the Pyramids ~ ride (and scent) a Camel and cuddle a Baby one, Scheduled for 2020 or Earlier on Mainstream TV. Pleased you got the Pyramidal feeling of GIZA its awesome. Fortunately my Parents were rich enough to take me to many of these places as a Teen. Now I take them to exotic Places ~ Quid pro Quo ! Brotherly Hugs ~ BRIAN
Wonderful poem! I've long dreamt of seeing the pyramids! Maybe someday. Very creative poem. Hugs-Christina
THANKS CHRISTINA (love the elegance of you full name !) Thanks for your supportive comment. I did mention to MALU that exotic places ~ like EGYPT are much closer to the UK than the USA therefor cheaper ~ if you can afford to go ! Hope your dreams come true but maybe with reality TV by 2020 "The Pyramids along the Nile" will come to you ! PYRAMIDAL HUGS ~ BRIAN
I like your pyramid poem Brian. I will have to experiment with this and other shape poems- easier with pen and paper though than electronically fir some shapes! Have visited the Pyramids at Giza 😊
Thanks SUE ~ great that you have seen the PYRAMIDS @ GIZA ~ great experience ~ and the SPHINX also ! Yes indeed ~ shape poems are harder to write electronically ~ for DIAMOND & HOUR CLASSES etc I get the top half correct ~ geometrywise and then repeat it backwards for the bottom half. This poses an additional problem ~ the reverse half has to make sense linguistically ~ I'm beginning to sound like a Teacher ! Yours BRIAN. Please check my Office Poem ~ Thanks B.
This was really interesting to read, and I liked it a lot!!
Thanks TBT ~ All poems have "SHAPE & FORM" but we can always add another dimension ! Of course the Poem must complement the SHAPE ! Please check my OFFICE Poem and also my FUSION on GAMES & PASTIMES ~ click on DEVELOPING to see the new Fusions ~ OK. Yours BRAIN
Another shape done. I bet this Pyramid poem will last longer than the Pyramid itself.
Excellent.
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