FIVE SEVEN FIVES

Michael Edwards

 

 

FIVE SEVEN FIVES

                                                                                                            

Dominion of mind.

Dark shadow in attendance.

Lost to evil thoughts.

 

It is not just our genes;

it is how we nurture ourselves

that will define us.

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In the midst of life

in desolating routine

robbed of volition.

 

 

  • Author: Michael Edwards (Offline Offline)
  • Published: September 6th, 2017 00:00
  • Comment from author about the poem: Another of my line drawings . I have been much influenced in these by the work of Benjamin Chee Chee - the Canadian First Nation artist
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Comments7

  • Goldfinch60

    Good ones Michael, especially the second one.

    • Michael Edwards

      Thanks Andy - No2 now clearly in the lead.

    • orchidee

      Fine writes and pic M. I may do 2 or 3 at once, then have a backlog waiting to post them. Other days none at all. I don't plan how many per day. Just depends how things go.

      • Michael Edwards

        Cheers Orchi. I do try to post one per day but with my more serious poems they can take some while to both write and perfect (not they ever do achieve perfection - if only). The result is that I find myself writing short less demanding pieces to keep up - might take a bit of time off soon to work on longer works.

        • orchidee

          I'm not bragging, but most of my poems don't seem to take too long to write. I suppose we don't have to rhyme every time. Oops, just rhymed there! lol. Maybe try a sort of extempore, free-flow piece, as if writing a paragraph, or a sort of précis piece. Just a couple of suggestions.

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        • BRIAN & ANGELA

          Thanks MICHAEL ~ love No. 2 ~ love anything in GENES

          She was BRAZILIAN
          She wiggled and her big end
          Justified the JEANS !

          Pleas check my 822 ~ Thanks BRIAN

        • Fay Slimm.

          Just love the middle three liner here Michael - so so true is this short statement

          • Michael Edwards

            Looks like is the clear winner - thanks Fay

          • WL Schuett

            What a challenge to write like this good work Michael

            • Michael Edwards

              A challenge but good fun but wait till you see tomorrows - if it's finished that is - thanks Bill

            • Mugsdaddy

              I find this style of writing challenging. You like Santita make it look easy I've made one attempt perhaps I'll take another shot. Excellent work nicely tied together.
              M

              • Michael Edwards

                The restriction in syllable count is not easy to meet but like all things practice helps - anyway these turned out quite reasonable - thanks for your kind encouragement.

              • myself and me

                What are the birds doing? Are they counting syllables or are they trying to discuss about the poems?
                Is this another invention?
                Love the poems.



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