SHE CONFIRMS
Still night
Invading dark
Soft murmur of slow lapping waves
Meeting of sea and sky undefined.
House lights
Along shore
Reflections shine
All quiet.
All quiet
Slow walk
Descending road to the bleak shoreline
Creaking wooden pier waits and beckons
Supporting rails
Standing still
Beneath them
Black sea.
Black sea
Gently heaving
Senses fuelled by darkness and mystery
Together in harmony hand in hand
She predicts
He ponders
He speaks
She confirms.
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Author:
Michael Edwards (
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- Comment from author about the poem: My version of a trinet: three stanzas each in word count 2266222
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And the master shows us again how it's done! Beautiful drawing too!
And I confirm: This is good!
Thanks Fred. With each line being a statement within itself I thought this would be easy but not so - I did my best to ensure meter and there are a couple of lines which could be improved and will be after a few more visits - I find it best to leave a few days and return with a fresh mind.
Very deliberate picture drawn in the minds eye. Very nearly perfect.
I'll get there one day - thanks M
Another good write in a form I had not seen before Michael.
Thanks Andy
A fine write and pic M. You must spend more time then I do in preparation, to polish up poems. I tend to be more free-flow. Not that I get some mad frenzy of the muse and write it all instantly. Gosh, that's melodramatic!
I can just imagine you writing in a frenzy like a mad Beethoven - er what did you say?
Nice one, Michael.
ThanksFfrank
And the black sullen swell of the sea held its breath at the suspense created here. Compelling read. I was mindful not to slip on that wet wooden pier.
I almost added something along the lines of 'the wet green pier'
"Still night, all quiet, slow walk, together in harmony hand in hand"
What a peaceful, romantic night.
Love the line drawing. White line on dark background, fit the poem perfect.
Thanks m&m - didn't mention the rain - didn't want to spoil the image ! lol 🙂
Thanks you MICHAEL for another perfect symbiosis of POEM & PIC. The TRINET and the SILHOUETTE ! I can empathise with the sentiments in each verse. Word count is good and the shape ~ each one an Angel of the North ! Yours BRIAN
Please check LOVE AT FIRST SIGHT ~ Thanks S & B.
Thanks so much Brian
Ohhh the melodrama of it all! *Gets out pen and paper for a mad burst of inspiration*.
Ah but - doesn't say what he confirms - that's a secret so there !!!!
Orchi having a mad burst on paper - conjures up images.
Oh, if he confirms anything hot, I shall swoon!
Really love this! It has a mysterious feel
Thanks for your comment Shannon
Well done Micheal conjures up a vivid picture...and a lovely line drawing
Cheers Bill - nice to have a bit of a mystery.
Well done again with duo of line drawing and trinet form of poetry. An engaging piece of work Michael.
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