Long Night-Sedoka

myself and me

The Road lamp is on

Pull my shadow thin and long

With wind greeting me good night

 

Moon peeps through curtain

Keep my soul wake for certain

Wet pillow for no reason

 

revised

 

The Road lamp is on

Pull my shadow thin and long

rain mixed with tear rolling down

 

Moon peeps through curtain

Keep my soul wake for certain

Wet pillow for no reason

  • Author: myself and me (Offline Offline)
  • Published: September 7th, 2017 09:16
  • Comment from author about the poem: Santita encourage me to try a sedoka. Here it is.
  • Category: Unclassified
  • Views: 59
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Comments8

  • WL Schuett

    Lovely , Lonely and sad ... but, lovely

  • orchidee

    Doh! What do I know about poetic styles?! I thought it was a lot of people writing about a car recently - a Skoda?! heehee. A fine write M.

    • myself and me

      I do not think this car could run far. Thank you O.

    • Michael Edwards

      What a great job you made of this - top notch m&m

      • myself and me

        Thank you M.E.. Your comment make me fly.

      • BRIAN & ANGELA

        Thanks M & M ~ there is a lot of OVERT pathos in this excellent SEDOKA ~ but the reasons are COVERT ~ Thanks BRIAN

        • myself and me

          You are right. Thank you for reading and commenting.

        • FredPeyer

          M&m, you just moved into the top echelon of writers here. Or maybe you were already there, just hiding!

          • myself and me

            I totally lost myself and me in your comment, do not know who I am now. Thank you.

          • Goldfinch60

            Super write m and m.

          • malubotelho

            Beautiful, no need to say more.

          • Violet bluebell( used to be yellow rose)

            Very lovely . I’ve not heard of a Sedoka before



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