Slicing through water clear and warm
At peace with myself, one with the ocean
Muscles straining, slowly rotating my arm
Heat generated by this perpetual motion
Conscious, rhythmical intake of air
No thought beyond the next move
Leaving everything behind, being where
Nothing counts but staying in the groove
Diving to the bottem where the corals lay
Graceful moves, an underwater dance
Wildly imagining being a Manta Ray
In the oceans limitless expance
Coming up for air, with a breath so deep
Cool sweet air rushing boldly in
Filling the lungs in one big sweep
With droplets of water running down the chin
I switch from breast to a dolphin stroke
Slapping the water with my feet
A happy dolphin I want to evoke
Thinking of its beauty with every beat
Turning on my back I slow and relax
Looking up into a sky so endless and blue
With a lonely airplane painting its track
A soothing picture and incredible view
The ocean holds me like my mothers womb
My worries drowning one by one
Slowly disappearing into depth and gloom
Freeing my mind, so all I see now is the sun
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Author:
Alfred Peyer (Pseudonym) (
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- Comment from author about the poem: Memories of a beautiful Maui Weekend with Family and Grand-Kids!
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You've got some serious zen going in this piece Fred. Lovely to read. You've done it well here.
Thanks so much Frank, didn't think about the zen, but you are right!
A very nice laid back poem. Good job.
I guess you know we are more laid back in Hawaii. There are bumper stickers that say: 'Slow down - This ain't the Mainland!'
Wow... I enjoyed swimming the clear blue waters with you... And the grandkids? Didn't yell, grandpa, come quick? Nice... relacong prose.
Thanks Roberto, went swimming to get away from them!
I know, I have eight and they're a blessing...
It is not that I don't love them, on the contrary! But after three hours I need a break!
Of course buddy, believe me, I know...
Beautiful peaceful write, I wojld like to say that I was with you but I cannot swim except in your words.
Thank you Goldfinch, at least when swimming in words you can only drown figuratively!
A fine write Fred. I might know zen, but I don't know those Yin and Yang fellas! lol.
Thank you orchidee, you don't have to know the two of them, they are always with you anyway!
Fantastic read, set me up for a fantastic day.
Thanks PD, that is a very nice comment, and much appreciated!
It actually did more than that! and I now see it helped me write today what was needed for a while and I road above my emotional wave.
Thank you again
Am very pleased that my scribble helped you with your writing. Do we get to see the result?
Just called it my roots
A superb read which I greatly enjoyed - wish I was swimming in those waters right now.
Thank you Michael, am glad you enjoyed it! You know, it is kind of sad that even though I live in Hawaii, I seldom get to go to the beach. There is always something to do. So this past weekend on Maui was like a mini vacation for me!
Very nice , peaceful, warm Could really picture it
Thank you WL. That is exactly what I tried to achieve with this poem. It is not something with deep meaning, but a simple 'get-away' from the daily problems and worries.
A great way to replicate the thrilling escape from gravity we experience in our flying dreams, isn't it? Enjoyed sharing your swim, Fred!
Exactly, Louis! Once you are under the surface you are in another world. Thanks for your kind comment!
I was there in that heavenly water with you Fred - a verse which excites yet gives feelings of peace. Favourite for me my friend.
Thank you so much, Fay! I did not set out to write a poem with deep meaning, just wanted to catch that feeling of freedom and happiness I get when swimming and playing around in the ocean. Am so glad you liked it, and thank you for making it a favorite!
A worry free moment, with your true self blended into the ocean.
Reading your poem, my mind feel so free.
Wonderful.
Thank you very much M&M, am happy to help free your mind! If you need anymore freeing, just holler!
Will sure do. Thank you.
Wonderful write Fred. I felt myself floating on the water, staring leisurely into a blue sky. So delicious and relaxing. Great description of a beautiful day.
Thank you malu! After what you went through with the storm, that is exactly what you deserve now!
Yes, I'm trying to relax as much as I can. I'm not sure if because of the stress or because of the pressure on the air but the ring on my ear came back furiously. It can also be because of eating too much salt on inappropriate food during the hurricane waiting. It is getting better after I went back running today. I was thinking about you.
Hope the tinning is only temporary, and will go away again soon. Mine is pretty permanent now. But I am so used to it that a lot of time I don't realize it. I am sure exercise and better food will have a positive impact. Take care of yourself!
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