FredPeyer

Ocean Swim

Slicing through water clear and warm

At peace with myself, one with the ocean

Muscles straining, slowly rotating my arm

Heat generated by this perpetual motion

 

Conscious, rhythmical intake of air

No thought beyond the next move

Leaving everything behind, being where

Nothing counts but staying in the groove  

 

Diving to the bottem where the corals lay

Graceful moves, an underwater dance

Wildly imagining being a Manta Ray

In the oceans limitless expance

 

Coming up for air, with a breath so deep

Cool sweet air rushing boldly in

Filling the lungs in one big sweep

With droplets of water running down the chin

 

I switch from breast to a dolphin stroke

Slapping the water with my feet

A happy dolphin I want to evoke

Thinking of its beauty with every beat

 

Turning on my back I slow and relax

Looking up into a sky so endless and blue

With a lonely airplane painting its track

A soothing picture and incredible view

 

The ocean holds me like my mothers womb

My worries drowning one by one

Slowly disappearing into depth and gloom

Freeing my mind, so all I see now is the sun

Comments14

  • Frank Prem

    You've got some serious zen going in this piece Fred. Lovely to read. You've done it well here.

    • FredPeyer

      Thanks so much Frank, didn't think about the zen, but you are right!

      • Frank Prem

        A very nice laid back poem. Good job.

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      • rrodriguez

        Wow... I enjoyed swimming the clear blue waters with you... And the grandkids? Didn't yell, grandpa, come quick? Nice... relacong prose.

        • FredPeyer

          Thanks Roberto, went swimming to get away from them!

          • rrodriguez

            I know, I have eight and they're a blessing...

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          • Goldfinch60

            Beautiful peaceful write, I wojld like to say that I was with you but I cannot swim except in your words.

            • FredPeyer

              Thank you Goldfinch, at least when swimming in words you can only drown figuratively!

            • orchidee

              A fine write Fred. I might know zen, but I don't know those Yin and Yang fellas! lol.

              • FredPeyer

                Thank you orchidee, you don't have to know the two of them, they are always with you anyway!

              • Poetic Dan

                Fantastic read, set me up for a fantastic day.

                • FredPeyer

                  Thanks PD, that is a very nice comment, and much appreciated!

                  • Poetic Dan

                    It actually did more than that! and I now see it helped me write today what was needed for a while and I road above my emotional wave.
                    Thank you again

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                  • Kat

                    A great fun relaxing in the sun kinda read. Loved it.

                    • FredPeyer

                      Thanks Kat, they were three absolutely gorgeous days with hardly any cloud. And the water was superb. Clean, clear, warm, salty. It really did feel like what I imagine the womb would be like.

                    • Michael Edwards

                      A superb read which I greatly enjoyed - wish I was swimming in those waters right now.

                      • FredPeyer

                        Thank you Michael, am glad you enjoyed it! You know, it is kind of sad that even though I live in Hawaii, I seldom get to go to the beach. There is always something to do. So this past weekend on Maui was like a mini vacation for me!

                      • WL Schuett

                        Very nice , peaceful, warm Could really picture it

                        • FredPeyer

                          Thank you WL. That is exactly what I tried to achieve with this poem. It is not something with deep meaning, but a simple 'get-away' from the daily problems and worries.

                        • Louis Gibbs

                          A great way to replicate the thrilling escape from gravity we experience in our flying dreams, isn't it? Enjoyed sharing your swim, Fred!

                          • FredPeyer

                            Exactly, Louis! Once you are under the surface you are in another world. Thanks for your kind comment!

                          • Santita

                            I agree with Frank about the "zen" - and I love it. I could picture you swimming like a dolphin, and then floating on your back. But, it is the last verse here that is the star - the freedom of your mind is beautiful! The ocean has some magic in it!

                            • FredPeyer

                              Thanks so much Santi! The ocean definitely does something to the soul. The immensity of it makes you realize how small you are and how unimportant. The feel of the salty water does feel like what I imagine the womb must have felt like (don't remember! :-) ). You are in a different environment and when looking back towards the beach, daily life and worries seem so far away!

                            • Fay Slimm

                              I was there in that heavenly water with you Fred - a verse which excites yet gives feelings of peace. Favourite for me my friend.

                              • FredPeyer

                                Thank you so much, Fay! I did not set out to write a poem with deep meaning, just wanted to catch that feeling of freedom and happiness I get when swimming and playing around in the ocean. Am so glad you liked it, and thank you for making it a favorite!

                              • myself and me

                                A worry free moment, with your true self blended into the ocean.
                                Reading your poem, my mind feel so free.
                                Wonderful.

                                • FredPeyer

                                  Thank you very much M&M, am happy to help free your mind! If you need anymore freeing, just holler!

                                  • myself and me

                                    Will sure do. Thank you.

                                  • Candlewitch

                                    dear Fred,

                                    your flowing words brought me into the swim with you! so glad your holiday was lovely! :)

                                    *hugs, Cat

                                    • FredPeyer

                                      Thanks so much Cat! It was short, but great! And I needed these swims just to get away from it all.

                                    • malubotelho

                                      Wonderful write Fred. I felt myself floating on the water, staring leisurely into a blue sky. So delicious and relaxing. Great description of a beautiful day.

                                      • FredPeyer

                                        Thank you malu! After what you went through with the storm, that is exactly what you deserve now!

                                        • malubotelho

                                          Yes, I'm trying to relax as much as I can. I'm not sure if because of the stress or because of the pressure on the air but the ring on my ear came back furiously. It can also be because of eating too much salt on inappropriate food during the hurricane waiting. It is getting better after I went back running today. I was thinking about you.

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