SPRING ~ With Love is crowned
SPRING ~ Flowers from fertile ground
SPRING ~ Young Lovers bloom
SPRING ~ Passions rage in Love's bedroom
SPRING ~ Love's Secrets ~ make me SWOON !
LAZY & HAZY
CRAZY Days of SUMMER ~ Love
AL FRESCO in SUN
NOTHING Prohibited ~ Love
UNINHIBITED ~ OVEN BUN !
FALL ~ A wonderous time
WHEN the temperature drops low
TREES shed all their clothes
NAKED ~ like to snuggle close
BY THE FIRESIDE ~ Me & Beau !
WINTERTIME is cold
FROSTY and bleak ! Animals
ALL play Hide & Seek
KEEP My Love Warm ~ Christmas treats
LOVE Sweet LOVE ~ between the sheets !
Thank for visiting ~ comments welcome ~ Love B & S XOX
Each of the verses in this Poem is a TANKA 57577 syllables.
There are Thousands of Poems dedicated to the SEASONS
this Collaboration Poem is dedicated to ALL the MPS Family !
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Author:
BRIANSODES (Pseudonym) (
Offline) - Published: September 13th, 2017 01:51
- Comment from author about the poem: In our COLLABORATION POEMS ~ Santi and I agree a Title (Theme) and the number of stanzas (verses) and allocate ~ you have to guess who wrote the first draft of each ! We then share and edit. Choice of visual is important ~ i love this one ! It is important that each verse has the same STRUCTURE (in this case 57577 English Form Tankas) and that they complement (but not overpower !) each other ~ And of course they must exemplify the Title. It works (and i trust you will enjoy the Poem) because SANTI and I are at the same level Poetically (Wordsworth ~ Grade 4) and also linguistically (although we could do one in Spanish) and on the same wavelength in our Muse ! For instance we both had the same Fall concept of the simile of the trees shedding their leaves ~ and exposing their naked beauty ~ and we shedding our clothes ! Please comment and if we get enough feedback we will collaborate on another. In verse 2 (Summer) the reference to OVEN BUN is to an English colloquialism for pregnancy we say "The Lady has a BUN in the OVEN !" Because we often cast caution and Durex to one side in "Summer Loving" it results in a healthy crop of SPRING BABIES ~ C'est la Vie ! Thanks for visiting please comment ~ Love to ALL ~ SANTI & BRIAN ~ XOXOXOX
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Now you've done it - made yourselves both swoon! So I'm the only one swooning! heehee.
Thanks STEVE ~ Sweet Love always makes me SWOON ~ But she's always worth it ~ AMEN ~ BRIAN
What would I know of this?! I never get beyond the swoon. And should I meet her?! heehee.
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Yes Brian, half my writing life is seasonal observations. And wonderful it is to be able to do that. Good job here Brian. Seasons greetings to you.
Thanks FRANK ~ Collectively and individually the Seasons do stir my MUSE, SANTI and I both love AUTUMN (or the FALL as she calls it !) so this is a good season for us. The UK still enjoys FOUR very distinct seasons each an every Year which is a BLESSING ! Yours S & B
You've both pulled it off so well - great result.
Thanks MICHAEL as I explained to KAT ~ Santi & I are symbiotic in many respects Poetically and Mentally ~ two minds operating as one ! Pleased a Gentleman of your poetic discernment is pleased with the result ! It encourages us to produce another ~ Thanks ~ yours SANTI & BRIAN
That's fun , nice write
Thanks WLS ~ YES ~ It does add another dimension to one\'s Poetry ! Although SANITA and I are 4300 miles apart Physically and in different Time Zones 6 hours apart we can communicate through MPS and design ~ submit ~ edit and post the final Collaboration Poem ~ it does take time ! Poetically and in terms of \"life view\" we are \"Soul Mates\" so we quicklky agree on Title ~ Form and Linguistic & Content level. We write our verses ~ compare ~ edit ~ publish ! Thanks for your comment ~ We did say if we got OK Comments we would publish another ~ watch this SPACE Yours SANTI & BRIAN
A wonderful collaboration. You changed basic math from 1+1=2 to 1+1=3
Thanks FRED because we respect each other ~ as Poets ~ we always work hard to produce something Special. Your second equation is proof of our Mantra ! "The outcome is always greater the the sum of the Parts !" Thanks for your support ~ Yours SANTI & BRIAN
Wonderful collaboration! Did Santita do Spring and Fall? Either way, these are simply fabulous! Great set of Tankas! Hugs to both--Christina
Well spotted CHRISTINA ~ I guess its the feminine touch that shows through. Because each stanza is allocated ~ and composed ~ separately there will be a gender bias ~ especially given this Title ! I guess Summer & Winter are more YANG than YIN ! Did you understand the implication of OVEN BUN ? It made me smile and I wrote it ! I love Tankas ~ twice as much scope as HAIKU (and less precious !) Thanks for your loving comment Love & Hugs SANTI & BRIAN XOXOXOX
"Seasons of love", another beautiful fruit of collaboration.
The structure, the content, the color and the picture fit perfect.
Thanks M & M ~ Your supportive comment makes our Collaboration Poems worthwhile. Every Poem I publish has A Picture (which sometimes inspires the poem !) ~ A Structure (Acrostic ~ Sonnet ~ Haiku etc) ~ A Story (the contents of the poem) ~ Color (or colors in which it is printed). I have been writing poetry for 24 years (10 ~ 34) and some of it has been considered GOOD ! SANTITA is an excellent Poet ~ great use of words ! We could choose JUST to publish singly ~ and we do ! BUT we chose to collaborate because we are poetic SOUL MATES ! We both consider that our Poem today (because we stimulate each other) is BETTER than either of our individual POEMS encapsulated in the COLLABORATION ! That (and the fact that the comments support it) makes the time and understanding and the creative effort to produce it ~ more than worthwhile ! Thanks again for you appreciation ~ Yours SINTI & BRIAN
They all so beautiful. Can not choose a verse and can not choose a season. I love all of them. Each has a different interest. If I would choose one of the trees I would choose the second one. The colorful one. So pretty. You two are amazing together. Awesome writing.
OBRIGADO MALU ~ I agree each verse has a frisson and perfection of their own ! And the four together even made my Heart beat faster ! I love GOOGLE ~ and it you have the patience to search ~ she provides us with the perfect picture ! YES The Summer Tree has a special beauty abov all the others ~ Perfection. SANTI and I are Poetic Soul Mates which is why it works so well Poetic Hugs from both of US ~ Santi & Brian XOX
Glorious tankas from you both.
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