First Love.
When she tasted the unbreathed air
away from girlhood's shallow stream
then it was she pinned up dark hair,
laced in her waist and saw meaning
in catching attention by tiny breasts
held upright and eyes full of secrets.
But the boy covered his face, things
like birds' nests cocooned his sight
so climbing trees came first with him
yet as she strolled branding his mind
with scented trails her siren-schemes
made his lone lake-bathing tasteless
as urges drown him in stranded grief.
Remembering her scarlet-red mouth
he, hooked like a fish with writhing
lips sunk as first love took its bounty.
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Fay Slimm. (
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You painted a perfect picture FAY from your sensuous Memory box ! I remember it well SADIE was Sweet 16 and I was 17 (half a lifetime away). Your elegant Poem brought her into sharp focus and a tear to my eye ! A HUG for you for being so perceptive on a FRIDAY MORNING ~ BRIAN Please check my OXYMORONS ~ thanks B. Loved the picture ~ perfect !
To remember her name shows how much she affected your boyish emotions back then dear Brian - Tis always the same when memories of first love come forward again. Thanks for the comment dear friend.
Absolutely gorgeous, Fay! You depicted first love in a beautiful and tender way.
Thanks Fred - yes I agree young love can be one of the tenderest of lasting emotions - - glad you enjoyed the trip down memory lane my friend.
I knew it, I knew it, I knew it. You women know what you do to us even when it seems innocent.
"Oh, is my hair a mess"
"Oops, my nipple slipped out"
"I'm not wearing perfume today "
You know, You know,
Mugs
Ha ha -- Mugs your comment shows you too were sunk some time in first love my friend. Us females know just what to do I agree - thanks so much for making me smile at what you think young girls say before appearing in front of the lads.
Superb write, first love starts so innocently.
Beauiful
Thank you for the visit to read First Love and so glad you enjoyed the subject and content.
Good write Fay.
Great description of a youthful first love. I could see it unfold and perhaps a glimpse of my own memories. .
Dear poet-friend am so pleased the read took you into your own memories - first love seems ever the best to our youthful eyes.
Fay, you truly have the gift and the talent to write poems. Such a wonderful lovely reading. Stunning.
Your wonderful support urges my pen onwards dear Malu - - and many thanks too for putting this verse into your favs.
Perfect depiction of young love at it's finest! Beautifully written as always. 🙂 Loved the picture too!
Yes I thought the picture showed a girl's intention so well Christina - young love makes its memories with a lifetime in mind - am pleased that so many readers can identify with those tender feelings.Thank you dear friend for your supportive comment.
A splendid tribute to, and portrait of, first love, Fay ... the inauguration into life's rich journey ... discovering "other"! Love this one.
Ah - thanks so much Louis for both your visit and for the lovely comment. I felt as I wrote it that first love deserves a bit more of our attention as it holds such tenderness.
Tenderness and innocence ... truly beautiful qualities!
Found it and glad I did - great write as always Fay
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