All it took from you was
the taste of your lips
Man, you've got what it takes!
To make me shiver
And, oh, do I quiver
When you get so close that I shake!
I want you all mine
Ooh-you're divine
One smell of your scent and I melt
You play off the cuff
but I've had enough
I like the cards I was dealt
I cannot refrain from yelling your name
And you are doing the same
Some call me 'Angel' but I don't feel like one
Not by the way we behaved last night
I've never needed anything that felt so right
But after this, it has to be done
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Author:
Christina (Pseudonym) (
Offline) - Published: September 24th, 2017 09:22
- Comment from author about the poem: This is strictly IMAGINATION. I tried a different rhyme scheme and in fact the first two lines don\\\'t rhyme at all, so, oh well. My meter is a bit off but be gentle!
- Category: Fantasy
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I could not bother about the metre, as I often do. I swooned before I could check it out! heehee.
Well thanks so much for stopping by and reading! Always appreciated!
As requested I'll be gentle with you Christina - great stuff.
Thanks for reading and your comment is appreciated as always!
WOW CHRISTINA ~ I never knew you felt like this ~ I even booked a Flight to LA LA Land ~ but it was RYAN AIR so it never took off ! Then I read the SMALL PRINT (I always do !) FANTASY ~ FANTASY ~ FANTASY ~ I just knew it couldn't be true because You & Jeremiah are far too too Happy for you to taste Forbidden Fruit ! So i will have to be Happy going on just being your LOVING BROTHER ! (which is much better than just being one of your 120 MPS Friends !) Love & Hugs BROTHER BRIAN XOX
I'm glad that you read the "Imagination" disclosure! Oh my goodness. You were so caught up in thinking it was truth you never said if you liked it or not. But yes, brother, I am still here and in good graces. 🙂 Hugs-Christina (Thanks for the read and I appreciate you commenting on it!!)
Well SISTER I LOVE it ~ The STRUCTURE and the SUBJECT ~ until I read that it was ONLY FANTASY ! In your naughty MIND but not in your faithful HEART ! And of course I would never leave ANGELA ! HUGS & CUDDLES ~ Brother BRIAN @@@@@@@@@@
Your Rhyme Pattern is complex but consistent here is my analysis ~ I trust you understand it ~ OK Rhyme Pattern (20 lines) is : xx abbacc deedff ghhg ~ I guess the first two lines don't rhyme because because your hand was shaking too much ~ NAUGHTY GIRL ! Hugs BROTHER B
Good job. My screen got a little overheated but an extinguisher fixed that.
Ha ha, I so appreciate your lovely feedback! Wonderful!
Great writing Christina. Sensual but soft. Enjoyed reading it. Lately I'm doing only free writings but I love cute rhymes. Need to write some soon.
Thanks so much malu for the visit and the read, glad you liked. I appreciate it very much!!
Thats beautiful. Becoming totally smitten.... everything going ZZZIIINNNGGG inside for your lover.
You made me reminisce.
I'm so glad you liked it, dusk! It was something new for me to do. I really appreciate it!
One of our most wonderful gifts is our imagination. Often i will have no more than one or two lines of inspiration and somehow after maybe an hour i have created a piece purely from imagination and people can relate to it. Amazing!. Anyhow- thats what you did here you amazing person..... now do it again LOL.
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Never mind the damn meter, it's just a great sizzling write Christina. ; )
Thanks AP!! I really appreciate the positive feedback, thinking about posting another one like it tomorrow! We'll see...Thanks again!
Yes, we will see. ; )
Metre is not required in a poem as good as this one.
Thank you! I might try my hand at another one. Appreciate the compliment!
And what an imagination this is! Well written, Christina!
Yes, yesterday and today I dabbled in fantasy, but I think I'm going to go back to my usual. I thank you so much for your wonderful compliment!!
Read well, felt perfect... A great write Christina..
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Thanks so much dear Neville......Christina
my pleasure...
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