IN DREAMS

Michael Edwards

 

 

IN DREAMS

 

In dreams

where winter rain

that fell from darkened skies

stirred up the mud upon the path

now baked by sun's heat till porcelain dry

as summer breezes softly blow

through whispering willows

wavering leaves

in dreams.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

  • Author: Michael Edwards (Offline Offline)
  • Published: September 25th, 2017 00:06
  • Comment from author about the poem: Rictameter is a scheme similar to Cinquain. Starting the first line with a two syllable word, it then increases in the number of syllables per line by two. i.e. 2, 4, 6, 8, 10 Then down again, 8, 6, 4, 2 Making the final line the same two syllables in the first line.
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  • Users favorite of this poem: Christina8, malubotelho.
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Comments9

  • Louis Gibbs

    'Mathematics as poetry' ... interesting construction, Michael! Your knowledge of poetry continues to amaze.

    • Michael Edwards

      Always looking for new forms - thanks Louis. The picture, by the way, is drawn in ink on gold leaf.

    • Goldfinch60

      Clever write Michael with very good words.

    • orchidee

      A fine write M. Was you 6 minutes making that coffee?!

      • Michael Edwards

        No but I was slowed down having spilt milk all over the work surfaces and having missed the time slot I took my time - sorry O

        • orchidee

          Ohh, I was chucking water about in church yesterday. I knocked over someone's water. No whisky in it though!

          • 2 more comments

        • BRIAN & ANGELA

          Thanks MICHAEL ~ Lovely RICTAMETRIC tribute to AUTUMN ~ my fave Season. Like other forms we have introduced and discussed it can produce an elegant shape, As a CLASSICAL POET (and LOVER !) I consider Shape & Size to be just as important as STRUCTURE & SUBJECT ! Thanks for sharing ~ BRIAN

          • Michael Edwards

            Thanks Brian
            - Love this form although like most of them it's not as easy as it looks.

          • Christina8

            I loved your poem-so lovely- and that you have introduced us to the rictameter! I may have to try my hand at it! Faved!

            • Michael Edwards

              Thanks Christina - look forward to seeing something in the gallery. And a further thank you for saving it.

            • WL Schuett

              Another intriguing poem Michael, again a structure I never heard of , well done

            • malubotelho

              Another beautiful so poetic piece. Love the form of this. Thanks Michael.

            • FredPeyer

              Great poem and even greater (if I may say so) drawing, Michael.
              And btw, how do you keep that oh so thin gold leaf from crumbling up when drawing on it?

              • Michael Edwards

                Cheers Fred - the gold leaf was first stuck to the paper so crumbling wasn't the problem - the difficult bit was applying the ink as it tends to sit like tear drops rather than stay in place - not easy and I've not attempted it since.

                • FredPeyer

                  Maybe if you mix the ink with glue, or flour, or sugar, it might stick more easily! 🙂

                • dusk arising

                  Bootiful sir! I only wish my dreams were so placid.



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