THE TEMPTRESS
Driven by proclivity
she plays with hearts
a tauntress she
driven by proclivity
for every heart she has a key
wherein she feigns seductive arts
driven by proclivity
she plays with hearts.
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Author:
Michael Edwards (
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- Comment from author about the poem: Currently reading ‘A Changed Man’ by Thomas Hardy and came across a superb triolet and thought ‘I must write another’ – so here it is. A Triolet is a poetic form consisting of only 8 lines. Within a Triolet, the 1st, 4th, and 7th lines repeat, and the 2nd and 8th lines do as well. The rhyme scheme is simple: ABaAabAB, capital letters representing the repeated lines.
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Good write, repetitions always work well in poetry.
Thanks Andy - that's why I like this form so much.
A fine write, if a bit swoony for me! Someone found too many 'Alleluias' in a hymn a bit tiresome. Mind you, with the repetitions there were 35 of them in the hymn altogether!
Thirty five ? Alleluia ! That's a lot of repeats I say that's a lot of repeats.
Thanks MICHAEL ~ Nothing like a TRIOLET to start another Perfect Day ~ Yours BRIAN.
Thanks Brian - suffering from a very heavy cold at the moment so not sure of it's perfect but fingers crossed and paracetomols taken so here's hoping !!
Michael, you really are the master of poetic forms! And beautiful too!
Now for me, since I am not so good at it, is there a form that would require five lines, with all five repeating?
Thanks Fred. Your comments are quite inspirational - there will be a form which you've inspired me to write as and which I'm literally inventing as I type this where just one word changes in each line. A challenge but I'll get it right and post something - now see what you've stared !!
Powerful subject and the triolet form with its repetition is an inspired addition Michael. - - Fine read.
Thanks Fay - she is a bit of a minx isn't she.
A very nice write Mike! Sensitivity and Sexuality.. In its' purist form. Nicely done Mike and I really enjoyed this one!
Thank you Edward - I do appreciate your feedback.
Liked it Michael , hope you feel better soon
Thanks Bill - still in the dripping stages at the moment and throats beginning to get quite raw and pictures to hang in a local bank tomorrow so here's hoping. Tried to write earlier but couldn't concentrate.
I'm amazed at the many ways poetry can be presented as mathematical equations, Michael. You seem to know them all. Kudos!
Can't say I do know that many Louis - just the shorter ones - there are many that require a large amount of stanzas which I haven't got the patience for and which I've not even looked into.
Beautiful awesome form and the reading is very smooth. Another learning
Thank you Malu - I actually think this is among the best I have written - if only all I write was of this standard.
Well it is only getting better. We can not be perfect everyday.
You bring us all these great poems. Challenge us to take a whack at and still you come up with something new. Great job!
You've just come up with something pretty awesome yourself R - thanks for the comment - so much appreciated.
and let`s not forget this works both ways,
Oh it does indeed.
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