FIVE MORE FIVE SEVEN FIVES
Like falling raindrops
She fell into his being
And flooded his heart.
Shafts of probing light
Entangled in swaying grass
Slipping through like fish.
When no one can hear
The broken express themselves
With simplicity.
Obscure in the mist
Growing in stature and noise
Nearing the platform.
Sidling up and down
On the roof of the old barn
The fantail pigeons.
Michael Edwards © October 2017
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Another good set of 'michaelkus'. I do like the third one, there is great meaning in that one.
Great drawing, where is that building?
Fine writes and pic again Michael.
Thank you Orchi.
Thanks MICHAEL ~ Of the making of 575s there is no end ~ but all served with sagacity ! Being a Train Buff my fave is No. 4 Please check my SPACESHIP MOON ~ Thanks BRIAN
Thanks Brian - will check your spaceship
Michael, as far as I am concerned, the first one is absolutely tops! Love it, love it, love it! Next is number 3, then number 4 with 2 and 5 following closely. Actually, they are all good, but none as good as no. 1!
Thankfully there's always one in a batch which stands out and this seems to get the vote - cheers Fred
I absolutely adore the first 5,7,5! I'm a romantic at heart. But they are all very nice. Lovely drawing as well!
Thanks Christina - No1 goes well with one I posted yesterday.
I like the 3rd and is this a pen and ink drawing
Cheers Bill - yes drawn with a pen.
Love the title Michael!
Say all five, 5 or 7 times...
and you’ll have a tongue twister!
I like each one because
each one has its own message!
Your drawing reminds me
of the Biltmore Estate in
North Carolina!
A sight to behold!
~Laura~
Thanks Laura - I\'ve just found the painted version which I\'ll post tomorrow.
thanks so much for adding this to your Faves.
You’re welcome! It’s a happy memory for me and my hubby! The North Carolina trip was our 35th Anniversary gift from the family and the Biltmore Estate in Asheville was part of the trip! It has such rich history!
Laura - I've just googled the Biltmore Estate and it does look a great place - the sort of place I love to visit.
If you have the possibility
to do so, you must!
As I said, it’s rich with history!
It’s one thing to
read about it...
But a unique experience
to actually walk through it!
Love those shorts. Brief and full of meaning.
Written over a period and put together as a collection - thanks for looking in m&m
A most impressive illustration, Michael. I admire your artistic talent.
Number three is my favorite. It brings to mind an introvert who can only express himself well through his poetry. But there I go talking about myself instead of your fine work. Forgive me, Michael.
Always forgiven - thanks for your generous comments Louis
wisdom found in each one of these three liners Michael and oh that beautiful pen or pencil work of somebody's gorgeous dwelling is simply first class.
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