HER TAINTED HEART
Carried by the whispering winds
in soft low notes she heard his voice
which echoed over wood and moor.
She felt the stab of nettle stings
beside the tumbling walls of time
in mortar where his vision lay.
Ill luck ordained her presence there
In refuge with her deep remorse
she cried into the night.
And just as metal deep in mines
the fire burnt within her heart
in ashes now the dream foregone.
Bathed deep within obscuring mists
she drank the raindrops as they fell
and washed her tainted heart.
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Author:
Michael Edwards (
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- Comment from author about the poem: Been in London for a few days but back again with a cheerful little piece.
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Michael, the whole poem is great, but the last stanza is extra-ordinary!
I also like how the painting seems to be less and less finished as they eye moves to the left, a bit like moving from reality to dream.
Thanks Fred - I so much appreciate your kind words - I revisited this poem many times before posting it and still not sure about a couple of the lines. I do like this style of painting and will try to copy it in further work.
This is a wonderful poem Michael the wistfulness and sorrow wash over it like the rain on her tainted heart.
I like the artwork, it seems to be a slightly different style than than your usual ones.
Thanks Andy - yes a bit different from my style but I do like the free flow of it
A fine write and pic Michael.
Thanks Orchi
Finely crafted work here, the painting and poem. I think they're both perfect as they are, but that's just me. Very well done Michael.
Thanks AP - Guess I'll leave them alone.
Excellent as always MICHAEL ~ A Flow Painting to embellish a Lowing Poem ! Yours BRIAN ~ "Please Send Flowers" in my new FUSION and enjoy a cyber massage with my AROMATHERAPY OK poem ! Thanks B.
Thanks so much Brian.
Loved the poem--last stanza really great! Also great watercolor!
So pleased you enjoyed them both Christina,
A couple fine works of art , I really like the feel of this poem , well done Michael
Thanks Bill - I feel honoured that you have saved it - thanks again.
May the raindrop clean "her tainted heart", free her suffered soul. Beautiful poem, fresh paint.
Let's hope it does - thanks and for the save - really appreciated.
The flow slows to a poignant finalé in this ballad of love ending - - good read again Michael and oh how I love the expert display of un-finishing in that picture.
Thanks Fay and I love the word 'un-finishing' - might use it myself.
"Her Tainted Heart" title sent me looking for guilt on her part. Overly suspicious I suppose. Loved the poem throughout, each stanza drawing a picture of love lost and a heart "tainted." Phil A.
P.S. On the art- would like to have seen it completely colorized. Somehow it seems unfinished. Beautiful in its own right, though.
Thanks so much Phil. The idea of leaving part of the work uncoloured is quite a popular concept over here and it can look really good leaving much to the imagination. Or at least that's the idea. in En
Loved the last stanza!
The watercolor is quite
effective! Excellent!
Thanks so much Laura
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