THE MERMAIDS SIGH
A dawdling canting see-saw song
no cries of passion weak or strong
a song bereft
of any breadth
and yet in tune the notes sung well
accompanied by the oceans swell.
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Author:
Michael Edwards (
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- Comment from author about the poem: A short one for today - drawing is nearest I could find to a mermaid.
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The mermaids draw you into a compelling way of life. Good write Michael.
I couldn't find one willing to model for me - sadly.
Good write and pic Michael. I can't see any fish tail on her! lol.
I'll have to fin'k' about that Orchi.
Love the drawing, very exquisite, minimalist, but leaving a lot to the imagination by not showing a face. (She is a redhead, about 25 years old, extremely good looking!)
Ah, so sorry, am supposed to say something about the poem, but your drawing took my breath away.
Let's just say that this is the most beautiful sigh I ever read!
Thanks Fred I do like doing these minimalist pieces but currently am more involved in paintings without using a brush. So pleased you liked mu humble offerings.
Makes one wonder what could make a mermaid sigh. Great write and drawing Michael.
Thanks AP and for another save.
I could hear after reading that sigh of a mermaid from here in deepest west Cornwall dear Michael -- - -- and that mind-boggling line drawing is simply fan-blinkin'-tastic .
How I would love to meet a mermaid - did see the one in Copenhagen and was so disappointed with it - so small 0 nothing like I'd expected. As for my line drawings they do take quite a bit of time sketching them and then reducing the line until I have the minimum amount of linework without compromising the subject matter. Thank you as always Fay
The long sigh still echo in the wet air above the ocean. concise paint with pretty poem.
Do appreciate your kind comments - thanks m&m.
I'm in awe of what an artist can evoke with so few lines! The minimalistic drawing is stunning and provocative, Michael. A well written poem as well. Kudos!
Aw thanks - you are too kind.
You confound me, Michael ... how a left-brain lawyer can master the right-brain endeavors of artist and poet so well. A well connected brain, I suppose.
Thanks MICHEAL Love the Poem 'n Pic but in the drawing you missed the key anatomical feature the TAIL ~ An Apache Chief on being introduced to his first Naked Mermaid ~ raised his hand in greeting and said ~ HOW ? I have seen real Mermaids in WEEKI ~ WACHEEI Florida USA ~ and they are exactly as your poem describes them ! Another unforgettable experience ~ ONLY IN AMERICA ~ Thanks for sharing ~ BRIAN
It's a fishy tale anyway Brian - and only 7 on a SCALE of 1 to 10!!
Forever chanting to her tidal cadence she draws us to the shoreline of our conscious reality. Fascinating subject this and quite timeless. I like what you've done with it.
Thanks Dusk.
I have a notion that the motion of the ocean - or its "swell" / are all the Mermaids sighs as they try to make small fry - and when they yell ? it's the oceans "roar."
Just a theory.
Kidding aside a potent question, with no answer. Poetical minimalism as well as artistic minimalism , saving on ink? Loved the poem, got me to thinking, - Phil A.
Nice one Phil and didn't save much ink - it took a lot of drafting to reduce it down to a few lines - and quite a bit of dribble 🙂
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