One of the black stockings was ripped

The once beautiful dress had seen better days

Brightened up with dime store bling-bling jewelry

Whatever was left of the makeup was smeared

The hair looked like it could use a washing

But the face was beautiful, defiant, almost regal


Sitting with her shapely legs crossed

On that rickety stool at the bar

She exuded confidence and attitude

Fuck you too and I don’t care

Written plainly across her expression

Her mascaraed eyes mirroring her mood


‘Excuse me, lady, may I buy you a drink?’

She turned her head slowly, languidly,

Startling blue eyes under long lashes

Pink lipstick glowing in artificial light

The edges of the beautifully shaped mouth

Starting to slightly curve upwards


‘You may’, said in a low, raspy, smoky voice

Accompanied by a short royal wave of the hand

‘But don’t get any ideas, I ain’t that kind of broad’

Negated by the slow smile starting to spread

Across that beautiful face, never reaching the eyes

But holding out non-existent promises


She nursed her drink, absorbed into herself

The guy knew it then, he never had a chance

But did not mind, was proud in fact, to have

Received that smile, having gotten the attention

Of Cindy who had once been a leading actress

Or so they said



    A short story well done.


    • FredPeyer

      Thanks so much Lawless, that's exactly what it is. More of a character study than anything else.

      • LAWLESS

        I love how you are experimenting, life's too short, you know.

      • kevin browne

        brilliantly detailed of a women life in failing miserably and well expressed. your poetry is certainly growing upwards dear Fred.

        • FredPeyer

          Thank you so much Kevin! But now you are putting a lot of pressure on me!

        • Goldfinch60

          Very good write, the goodness of people is on the inside not the image that is first seen with the eyes.

          • FredPeyer

            Thanks Goldfinch, you are so right. How many times do we write somebody off just because of his/her looks. If we would take the time to look inside, it might be a whole different story.

          • Michael Edwards

            More than an experiment - anyway whatever it sure paid off Fred.

            • FredPeyer

              Thank you so much, Michael! I do appreciate your comment.

            • orchidee

              Good write Fred. Did you meet her? And should I get to know her?!

              • FredPeyer

                Thanks orchidee, no I don't think you should meet her. She might know you from the 1600's. And I don't know what kind of impression you made on her then.

              • Louis Gibbs

                "the slow smile ....... never reaching her eyes." What a great line! You portray her exquisitely, Fred. Well done character study!

                • FredPeyer

                  Thanks so much Louis, am glad you like it.

                • BRIAN & ANGELA

                  Thanks FRED for a beautifully penned Character Study ~ it did NOT needed a picture because you painted her perfectly ~ she triggered all my senses ! I saw he beauty and sadness and poverty ~ I scented her perfume her perfume & neglect and heard the sadness in her voice. I would have loved to touch her ~ to taste her ~ but perhaps that is another chapter. I am old enough (34) to have encountered Ladies of her ilk ~ but (as you indicate) their barriers are difficult to penetrate ~ BUT ~ in my experience they are always ready to accept a drink and some chat ~ BUT ~ at a distance ! Thanks for sharing ~ BRIAN

                  • FredPeyer

                    Thanks so much Brian, for reading and for your very comment. Am glad you perceived her the way I wanted to paint her. And Brian, better stay away from touching or tasting, Angela wouldn't be too happy about that!!! :-)

                  • Accidental Poet

                    Always true Fred, a book is not judged by it's cover. I'd say your experiment turned out very well.

                    • FredPeyer

                      Thanks so much AP! This is another example of people one should not judge: Here in Hawaii you see sometimes a local older guy, not very well dressed, shorts, t-shirt, slipppers, looking like a bum. That guy could easily own a few houses worth millions!

                      • Accidental Poet

                        The easy life Fred.

                      • Joe Dawson

                        There is a whole lot of truth here Fred and you have handled it very well indeed. Destitute with dignity almost contradictory but not so for us humans for when the going gets tough the tough get going as they say and Cindy shows all the signs of a girl who will not be beaten. Good work. You're right Fred, a backing track is music and in this case the music behind the commentary. Love your portrayal of Cindy.

                        • FredPeyer

                          Thanks so much, Joe! People handle hardships in different ways. Some give in, others fight. And there is always a story....

                        • Allysnewworld

                          Awesome! love it

                          • FredPeyer

                            Thanks so much Allys! I do appreciate you reading it and commenting!

                          • myself and me

                            From this short interaction, lead our imagination to what she had been through all those years.

                            • FredPeyer

                              Thank you m&m, I think that is the beauty of a short piece like this. It leaves much to the imagination, about the past of that character, but also about the future. You know m&m, that is also why I like to read a book, rather than see a movie. With the book I can use my own imagination, whereas in the movie we follow the imagination of the director.

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