THE RING
He slowly gave her the ring
Would her hand tremble?
Would it fit?
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Author:
Michael Edwards (
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- Comment from author about the poem: THE RING The English word quinzaine come from the French word qunize, meaning fifteen. A quinzaine is an unrhymed verse of fifteen syllables. These syllables are distributed among three lines so that there are seven syllables in the first line, five in the second line and three in the third line (7/5/3). The first line makes a statement. The next two lines ask questions relating to that statement.
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Clever write Michael.
Like the painting as well, is its title "Blocked Pathway"?
Not yet titled - thanks for the suggestion Andy.
A fine write and pic Michael. I quinze (can) appreciate this poem. These jokes get cornier. You quinze dump my jokes in the bin! lol.
I quinzent do that Orchi cos my bins not a quinze bin
Very interesting and pretty painting. Love the quinzaine--never heard of it but it makes for a very nice short poem.
Ta Christina
Never heard of a Quinze before. Sounds like a real challenge in those confines. Thanks for the education and the lovely poem .
My pleasure - thanks for your kind words.
Always learning something from you Micheal, not saying it’s something I need to know , still interesting... good work
I'm full of useless info - thanks Bill
I quinze not improve on your witty comment! But why is 'seize' (sez) 16 and not seize, to grab hold of?! And why is it not 'i before e, except after c'?
And why do I lose sleep over these really important matters?! lol.
Is that why the 'ice' in my gin's just melted?
GREAT QUINZIANE MICHAEL ~ Not easy to pen a coherent (and intriguing) poem in just 15 syllables ~ BUT you just did ! An old proverb says ~ If the Veil fits wear it ~ BUT ~ if the Ring doesn't then run screaming from the Altar ! Your Q stirred such nuances ~ Thanks for caring ~ love the technological visual ! I am a Chemical Engineer and it reminded me of the inside of a Reaction Vessel ~ A very hallowed place ! Yours BRIAN. Please add a Bouquet of Flowers to my Fusion ~ for your lovely WIFE ! Thanks B.
Thank you Brian - much appreciated.
The form is quite tricky and you make it exciting Michael. Great read.
Pleased you liked it Fay.
Great painting, very interesting poem. You are a master at these mathematical formula poems!
Thanks Fred
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