THE RING

Michael Edwards

 

THE RING

 

He slowly gave her the ring

Would her hand tremble?

Would it fit?

 

 

 

 

 

  • Author: Michael Edwards (Offline Offline)
  • Published: November 13th, 2017 00:40
  • Comment from author about the poem: THE RING The English word quinzaine come from the French word qunize, meaning fifteen. A quinzaine is an unrhymed verse of fifteen syllables. These syllables are distributed among three lines so that there are seven syllables in the first line, five in the second line and three in the third line (7/5/3). The first line makes a statement. The next two lines ask questions relating to that statement.
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  • Goldfinch60

    Clever write Michael.

    Like the painting as well, is its title "Blocked Pathway"?

    • Michael Edwards

      Not yet titled - thanks for the suggestion Andy.

    • orchidee

      A fine write and pic Michael. I quinze (can) appreciate this poem. These jokes get cornier. You quinze dump my jokes in the bin! lol.

      • Michael Edwards

        I quinzent do that Orchi cos my bins not a quinze bin

      • Christina8

        Very interesting and pretty painting. Love the quinzaine--never heard of it but it makes for a very nice short poem.

      • Drewp

        Never heard of a Quinze before. Sounds like a real challenge in those confines. Thanks for the education and the lovely poem .

        • Michael Edwards

          My pleasure - thanks for your kind words.

        • WL Schuett

          Always learning something from you Micheal, not saying it’s something I need to know , still interesting... good work

          • Michael Edwards

            I'm full of useless info - thanks Bill

          • orchidee

            I quinze not improve on your witty comment! But why is 'seize' (sez) 16 and not seize, to grab hold of?! And why is it not 'i before e, except after c'?
            And why do I lose sleep over these really important matters?! lol.

            • Michael Edwards

              Is that why the 'ice' in my gin's just melted?

            • BRIAN & ANGELA

              GREAT QUINZIANE MICHAEL ~ Not easy to pen a coherent (and intriguing) poem in just 15 syllables ~ BUT you just did ! An old proverb says ~ If the Veil fits wear it ~ BUT ~ if the Ring doesn't then run screaming from the Altar ! Your Q stirred such nuances ~ Thanks for caring ~ love the technological visual ! I am a Chemical Engineer and it reminded me of the inside of a Reaction Vessel ~ A very hallowed place ! Yours BRIAN. Please add a Bouquet of Flowers to my Fusion ~ for your lovely WIFE ! Thanks B.

              • Michael Edwards

                Thank you Brian - much appreciated.

              • Fay Slimm.

                The form is quite tricky and you make it exciting Michael. Great read.

              • FredPeyer

                Great painting, very interesting poem. You are a master at these mathematical formula poems!



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