Michael Edwards

MAN'S CONSTRUCT

 

 

MAN'S  CONSTRUCT

 

The verdant rolling lands abut

the boundaries of man’s construct.

Mills and manufactories

furnaces and potteries

as steel stone and brick degrade

sediment and soot invade.

The verdant rolling lands abut

the boundaries of man’s construct.

 

 

 

 

 

 

  

 

 

Comments9

  • Goldfinch60

    Good write Michael, I have not come across that structure before.

    Is the artwork another one of your styles, I like it.

    • Michael Edwards

      Thanks Andy. The painting is done more conventionally with acrylic applied by brush - not a usual style but just trying out different approaches,

      • Goldfinch60

        Trying something different is always worthy, it is surprising where it may lead.

      • orchidee

        Good write and pic Michael. Oohh good, syllable counting! I shall probably think of a tune to this before long, though it's a bit of a tricky layout (metre). Well, use yards then Orchi!

        • Michael Edwards

          You'll get the measure of it Orchi.

        • FineB

          Many thanks Michael.

          Great poem.

          I loved the picture too accompanying your poem.

          Keep writing
          FineB

          • Michael Edwards

            Thanks FineB - I do like trying out these different forms and this is a new one to me.

          • Louis Gibbs

            Where in the world do you come up with so many formal structures of poetry, Michael? I had no idea. This one is intriguing, and well done.

            • Michael Edwards

              I get them from various books and from the web - there are a lot out there but many stipulate a high minimum number of stanzas and being lazy I tend to ignore them in favour of those which can be done in 4 stanzas or less. Actually because of their stipulations I find them difficult and very restrictive but always a challenge. Thanks as always Louis for commenting - much appreciated.

              • Louis Gibbs

                A true student of the art, you are!

              • FredPeyer

                You quite nailed this mathematical poem. Too early in the morning for me to count anything!
                The painting seems to be a departure from your usual style, you are really very gifted, Michael!

                • Michael Edwards

                  Always like a challenge but not sure about the gifted bit - just a tryer - thanks Fred.

                • BRIAN & ANGELA

                  Thanks MICHAEL ~ love the OCTELLE form ~ Great economy of Rhyme and Rhythm ~ Powerful inditement of the Industrial Revolution and its scaring of the Countryside ! Love the pyramidal painting ~ Yours BRIAN

                • Laura

                  Michael,
                  Love the painting! I truly admire your artwork! Also, a great poem! It reminds me of a place where I Once lived! I too have learned about the Octelle form from you! You are a master teacher for certain!
                  Thank you!

                  • Michael Edwards

                    My pleasure and thank you for the compliment

                  • myself and me

                    You constructed this poem perfectly.

                  • Suresh

                    Your poem will outlast what man constructs



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