MAN'S CONSTRUCT
The verdant rolling lands abut
the boundaries of man’s construct.
Mills and manufactories
furnaces and potteries
as steel stone and brick degrade
sediment and soot invade.
The verdant rolling lands abut
the boundaries of man’s construct.
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Author:
Michael Edwards (
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- Comment from author about the poem: The octelle created by Emily Romano, is a poem consisting of 8 lines with a syllable count of 8 8 7 7 7 7 8 8 and a rhyme scheme of aa/bb/cc/aa . The first two lines and the last two lines are identical.
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Good write Michael, I have not come across that structure before.
Is the artwork another one of your styles, I like it.
Thanks Andy. The painting is done more conventionally with acrylic applied by brush - not a usual style but just trying out different approaches,
Trying something different is always worthy, it is surprising where it may lead.
Good write and pic Michael. Oohh good, syllable counting! I shall probably think of a tune to this before long, though it's a bit of a tricky layout (metre). Well, use yards then Orchi!
You'll get the measure of it Orchi.
Many thanks Michael.
Great poem.
I loved the picture too accompanying your poem.
Keep writing
FineB
Thanks FineB - I do like trying out these different forms and this is a new one to me.
Where in the world do you come up with so many formal structures of poetry, Michael? I had no idea. This one is intriguing, and well done.
I get them from various books and from the web - there are a lot out there but many stipulate a high minimum number of stanzas and being lazy I tend to ignore them in favour of those which can be done in 4 stanzas or less. Actually because of their stipulations I find them difficult and very restrictive but always a challenge. Thanks as always Louis for commenting - much appreciated.
A true student of the art, you are!
You quite nailed this mathematical poem. Too early in the morning for me to count anything!
The painting seems to be a departure from your usual style, you are really very gifted, Michael!
Always like a challenge but not sure about the gifted bit - just a tryer - thanks Fred.
Thanks MICHAEL ~ love the OCTELLE form ~ Great economy of Rhyme and Rhythm ~ Powerful inditement of the Industrial Revolution and its scaring of the Countryside ! Love the pyramidal painting ~ Yours BRIAN
Michael,
Love the painting! I truly admire your artwork! Also, a great poem! It reminds me of a place where I Once lived! I too have learned about the Octelle form from you! You are a master teacher for certain!
Thank you!
My pleasure and thank you for the compliment
You constructed this poem perfectly.
Your poem will outlast what man constructs
I like to think so - thanks Suresh.
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