Were I.
Unsettled my sleep,
yet were I with thee
each night would be
bedded in sated need.
Uneasy my soul,
yet were I to hold
thee as mine alone
would feelings unfold.
Unrested my mind,
yet were I now thine
on fire would be night
while we Paradise find.
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Fay Slimm. (
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you are such an entices poet that I wish I were in paradise with you. lovely poem, FaySlimm.
Thank you so much Kevin for the comment and compliment - - paradise is where we all wish to be as together dear friend we poets might change worldly wars to love's peace. - - Hugs full of hope
- - from Fay
Another fine write Fay.
Great you enjoyed the read Orchi -- thank you muchly for your visit and comment.
Sweet, succinct and one of your best - super work Fay.
Pleased you enjoyed the short and succinct Michael which at times I find says all my heart feels.
May you always be in Paradise. Good write.
Thank you indeed for that lovely wish Goldie - - Paradise offers all anyone needs.
"Unsettled my sleep ... Uneasy my soul ... Unrested my mind" ... Things you and I share with so many creative types, Fay. This one is simply beautiful and quite touching!
Yes dear Louis - I truly agree the unrested mind is a sign to all writers they need to create -- am delighted you found the read so appealing my friend. and thank you for commenting so generously on my writing efforts.
A simple message, said in an incredibly beautiful way. Fay, I adore your writing! A favorite for sure!
Really appreciate your kind encouragement on my writing Fred - - so pleased you enjoyed this read. - - It was rather special and written with heart. Thank you for adding it to your favourites.
Oh I love this poem, Fay! I hope you find Paradise! Very well written.
Ah - Thank you for your visit and bless you for the comment dear Christina - my imagination goes full swing at times on what parting could bring to some lovers and am glad that came out in the short-lined verse.
Thanks FAY for a very sensuous and alluring Love Poem ! Each verse draws us closer into you to fulfil your desires and share in your pleasures ! Bedded and sating need ~ Feelings unfolding ~ On fire and finding Paradise ~ TOGETHER ! Love the visual ~ a perfect trysting place for Love alfresco and "DULUX" would ensure your Lover behaved like a Gentleman ! Thanks for caring ~ Gentle Hugs ~ BRIAN @@@
Thanks so much Brian - -- your comment after reading my offering bathed it in even more allure - - glad you liked the visual too as I had hoped it enfolded the poem's yearning message and gentle hugs back. after all that sensuality.
My dear Poetess Fay,
Another extraordinary gem of a write accompanied by a great pic! Thank you for the share!
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