I shan’t go down to the sea again, to the crowded sea and the sky,
As all I see are brown-topped waves with humans asking why.
The wheel is turned to left and right to avoid the gathering throng,
And the mist upon the polluted waves, where we have got it wrong.
I shan’t go down to the seas again, for the cry of the dying tide,
Is a sad call and a muffled call, is nowadays left denied.
All I see is a wind-swept day with dark clouds dying,
And the black spray thrown, at the seagulls crying.
I shan’t go down to the seas again, to the vastly crowded strife,
To the polluted way and the dying way where the wind just poisons life.
And all I ask is for man to mend, his greedy, selfish ways,
So I can sleep in peace and love, for all my future days.
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Goldfinch60 (Pseudonym) (
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- Comment from author about the poem: I am the leader of a poetry group which meets once a month, for each meeting a topic has been selected where we read either our own or published poems on that subject. We are meeting this afternoon and the subject is 'Sea'. The obvious one that came to me was Sea Fever by John Masefield, it is the only one that I remember from my schooldays (that is a very long time ago!), I couldn't read that as I always read my own work, so I adapted it into what is written here.
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Wow Unique title! Catches the attention. This makes me think of littered beaches n polluted seas with your creative ink . Awesomely hardhitting n laments poetically. May be metaphorically intended as well. Interesting poem. Kudos for the rhyming too.
So nice to read from your pen again,
Pls do review my latest and add your thoughts on it.
Thank you SZK, much apreciated.
A fine write Gold. Hope poetry group goes well.
I went to a bi-monthly group. Sorry to say, it was somewhat boring. A couple of people waffled worse than me! I pretended to enjoy it.
Thanks Orchi, our group is quite good, there is no analysis of the structure of poems and soem of the poems lead to interesting discussions and laughter on many other things.
Catches the imagination - I can see it all in my minds eye. Super piece and hope it goes down well at your group - but then I know it will !
Thank you Michael, I do hope it will be OK.
A sad write Andy, but an honest write. I too am saddened by the litter I see everyday, and I wonder to myself what is going through the minds of these people as they so carelessly drop their trash to the ground.
On a lighter note, I'm sure your poem will go over well and bring much discussion. I may even look into a local poetry group here near me. Thanks for sharing.
Thank you AP, the poem did go over well, it was an interesting afternoon and many sights of the sea were seen from the group.
Glad to hear it Andy.
Ahhhhhh ANDY ~ You are showing your age again ! Paul Robeson a great Bass Baritone a great fave of My Dad's who heard him in Liverpool which he visited after his exile in the USA ~ accused of being a Communist ! I was born on the W Coast (UK) and now live on the S E Coast ! Love the STRUCTURE of your poem but not the Subject ! What would MEGHAN think if she read it and compared it to the incredible BIG SUR in California ? We have lovely beaches in Essex ~ Suffolk ~ Norfolk and are trying hard to promote TOURISM ! I'll forgive you if you check my latest FUSION on CHRISTMAS ! Yours BRIAN "Defender of UK Beaches"
Thanks Brian, our beaches are very good but homo sapiens seems to be out to destroy them with the rest of the world.
I too belonged to a poetry group before moving ... a group I helped found, and named. It was a lot of enjoyment sharing and commenting on our work, much like we do here. Well done, Goldie, this interpretation of John Masefield's poem!
Thank you Louis, poetry groups are great and I thoroughly enjoy the one that I am in.
An honest and revealing piece, brilliantly written!
Thank you pb, most kind.
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