Listening
Listening to the rhythm
The rhythm of my breathing
The rhythm of my footfalls
Feeling
Feeling the sensation
The sensation of my beating heart
The sensation of my tensing muscles
Staying
Staying in the moment
The moment of strength
The moment of truth
Losing
Losing all sense of time
Time of no consequence
Time standing still
Forgetting
Forgetting the world
The world of problems
The world of hardship
Relishing
Relishing the freedom
The freedom of being
The freedom of running
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Author:
Alfred Peyer (Pseudonym) (
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- Comment from author about the poem: Trying a different structure with repeating the main word from the previous line.
- Category: Reflection
- Views: 32
- Users favorite of this poem: Accidental Poet, poetboy123
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Comments7
A fine write Fred. The repetition gives a meditative style, I feel. Seems to slow the pace.
Thanks orchidee, you are right, it does slow the pace. Never thought of it until you mentioned it. And running can be meditative. Great comment!
An experiment with great results Fred.
Interesting structure and you've pulled it off Fred.
Good write, that freedom is well worth running for.
It works, I like it! You've come up with something here, as these comments confirm. Well done, Fred!
Great write
very creative of writing. It seems you are doing pretty well alone.
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