MORE THAN ONE ONE-LINER
She closed the door in the house of sorrowful dreams.
The candle lit; they drank the wine.
Her tears were fresh and borne of hope like rain that falls in April.
His appetite would only stretch to food he could digest.
On moon-white nights she raised her glass and savoured faery wine.
Strangers on darkened streets are never friends.
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Author:
Michael Edwards (
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There are some good ones there Michael. I like them all.
The first one could be reversed by changing 'in' to 'on'.
Thanks Andy. I also thought about 'at' but somehow I thought 'in' rolled off the tongue easier but now I'm beginning to have a rethink.
Another one of your wonderful abstracts. Thank you.
Compared to a dancer and being used on the front of this years Open Studios brochure in our area,
A fine write for me to read on my 21st (?) birthday today Michael!
If you were a young man in 1066 then each life year must be at least 50 years in terrestrial time and I bet you look young for your age Orchi - congratulations - have a great day
Thanks MIKE ~ Love the abstract of the FLAMENCO DANCER ~ Love Andalusia ! One liners are always pithy ~ My fave is the last one ~ Strangers on darkened Streets are never Friends ~ I have found this to be TRUE. I am too fit to be mugged but some have tried and some have (almost) died ! Thanks for sharing ~ BRIAN ~ Please check my Fusion ~ B !
I haven't got your youth but I walk quickly all the time and am very upright so, like you, I have never (as yet) been mugged. Mind you I wouldn't take chances on darkened streets. Thanks Brian.
Michael,
I enjoyed the read and
visual very much!
The third one is my
favorite! That’s the one
that truly speaks to me!
A great abstract painting
to accentuate your writing!
Thank you for the
share!
~Laura~
Thanks so much Laura - yes No3 is asking to be made into something longer but I haven't the inspiration at the moment.
I’m sure you’ll soon
hear inspiration knocking
on your door! It’ll never
overlook one of the best!
Be ready...inspiration is
almost ready to use that
knocker!
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oh my.... some of these are writing stories in my mind
you must surely be a very busy man to throw away such wonderful lines rather than include them into some of your wonderful works
I'm particularly impressed with 3, 4 and 5
No 5 now incorporated in a poem which I'll be posting tomorrow. Actually it'll be today here in the UK where it's 4.30am - in about half an hours time - yes I'm a very early riser..
I like this, good job
The shorter they are the harder they are to write. But you mastered the genre!
Thanks Fred - they are mainly ideas which come to me without a full length poem in mind.
I read loads and gather lists of words of words used in unusual context which I dip into when I'm writing. Came across parliament a few days ago being used metaphorically to mean a place where an individual is in charge and have woven this into my latest piece which I'll be posting soon.
Can't wait to read it!
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