Ticking Away.
Dawn hangs on the trees, light slivers floorward,
slips into sleep's acres,
turns shade to tailgates of force over which rays
snipe at quiescence
before sunrise leaps in to move bleary dreamers
to wide-away doers.
Day breaks to bathe passive eyes with forewarning
for blindness precedes
flashes of conscious surrender to sight as inertia's
sweet stupor
casts veils around seeing but breath catches gasps
when still becomes movement.
Ears mistake breezy whispers for proactive reality
when shaken sense rouses
to feel Heaven's infinity ticking away rested hours,
making the richer
seconds remaining for flight's drowsy treasure as
time hooks day to its use.
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Author:
Fay Slimm. (
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Lovely lazy wake up poem Fay! I wish I woke up this way - I sit bolt upright ready for action!
Ah - and that I can relate to too Lorna - - but maybe we can let time unwrap a bit more treasure for us when awaking now. Thanks so much for the read.
Back to our teens when we could sleep forever!
A fine write Fay. At the moment I've an adapted version beginning: 'And now the ice-cold chill blasts me ears, so they tingle.....' I didn't really want to write a poem like that! lol.
Yes Orchi - tis a bit more of an arctic awaking just now - roll on Spring eh ?
A language kaleidoscope - super work Fay
So pleased you saw the ins and outs of early awaking Michael - - a cold snap here at the moment but hoping spring arrives soon.
Beautiful write Fay.
Many thanks Goldie. Glad you enjoyed the read.
An absolutely beautiful write Fay!
We all wish could wake just like this eh Christina - but hopefully the verse will help us see what happens when light starts its journey to daytime. So pleased the read pleased you my friend.
I always delight in reading your verses but sometimes come up short in response to your breathtaking poems!!
WOW! and some people just call it waking up before dawn. I never knew what i was missing.
You put us to shame with work like this. Truly magnificent phrases you conjure into our unworthy minds.
Favourite for its brilliance!
Ah - a load of thanks D.A. for your kind comment on my efforts to show what dawn can show us should we awake in time to see its journey toward light. So pleased you enjoyed the read ..
Thanks FAY ~ 7:30 am and I'm ready to go ~ Lots of SNOW in the EAST ! Sorry I'm a day late but now I'm WIDE AWAKE and going to work on SKI's today ~ no fancy tricks though ~ Yours warmly BRIAN !
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