WOULD SHE SURVIVE?
Faults
weakness
impotence.
Would she survive
a force that held her bound with no escape
when she well knew that freedom would evade
her tortured sole.
Suffering
anguish
pain
anguish
suffering.
her tortured sole
When she well knew that freedom would evade
a force that held her bound with no escape
would she survive?
Impotence
weakness
faults.
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Author:
Michael Edwards (
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- Comment from author about the poem: Tetractys, a poetic form invented by Ray Stebbing, consists of at least 5 lines of 1, 2, 3, 4, 10 syllables (total of 20). Tetractys can be written with more than one verse, but must follow suit with an inverted syllable count. This example is a double versed example which is then mirrored.
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This is intricate, this was not an easy thing to do, and with meaning, bravo, maestro, bravo!
Thank you so much Jamie and thank you for the save. I often write in different forms although limerick and haiku tend to be my favourites, probably because I find them the easiest. Lol
I'll check out your poetry and hope you liked the painting - a village near mine painted about a year ago.
I always enjoy your paintings, both the canvas and the page.
Clever write Michael.
thanks Andy - fun to write in a masochistic sort of way.
Good write and pic Michael. I doubt I could do a hymn-poem like this. None of that metre, as far as I know.
I do 'easier' 8.6.8.6. often - called a Common Metre - fits to hundreds of hymns, even loads that I don't know the tunes for!
Thanks Orchi
Did this take hours to write? I tend not to be long in writing, but may be long in waffling on in some long poems!
I scribbled down the idea and then played around with the words while watching TV - so yes took quite a while but more because I had divided concentration.
I absolutely applaud your discipline Michael! Both in poetry and your beautiful beautiful paintings! This was fun to read and to follow the "pattern" - very clever!
thank you Lorna - I've just been compiled a folder of different poetry types so might try something else over the next few days,
MORNING MICHAEL ~ Thanks for your explanation DOUBLE MIRROR TERACTYS ~ It looks ~ reads & sounds excellent ~A Compleat Poem ! LOVE THE snowless Painting ~ very rural ! Yours in awe BRIAN !
Thanks Brian - I kinda guessed you would appreciate this.
Excellent poetic form, must have been hard to create with meaning within the confines of the poem. Great job!
Very restrictive but worth the effort - thanks Christine
This is awesome and very well written Michael... bravo!
That's really kind of you - thanks rr
Michael, in your answer to Goldie you mentioned the word 'masorchistic', just looking at your poem made me think how long it would take me and how much pain it would be to do something like that. You really are good, but you now that already! Kudos!
Thanks Fred - yes it did take a while although attention was divided.
The content and the shape of the poem are beautiful.
Thanks so much m&m - I appreciate your encouragement.
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