SHE WAS ALONE
The house was silent
time passed slowly.
she was alone.
There was no escape
winds raged outside
the house was silent.
The scars she bore
were deep and wide
time passed slowly.
His hurtful words
had caused the wounds
she was alone.
Cascade, a form created by Udit Bhatia. The form does not have any rhyme scheme; therefore, the layout is simple. Say the first verse has three lines. Line one of verse one becomes the last line of verse two. To follow in suit, the second line of verse one becomes the last line of verse three. The third line of verse one now becomes the last line of verse four, the last stanza of the poem.
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Michael Edwards (
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This is a very good write Michael and the structure is intriguing.
Thanks Andy
Michael,
As Gold stated, an intriguing structure to express a painful situation! Beautiful painting...Maestro Extraordinaire! Bravo!
~Laura~
Thanks Laura - I quite like this structure - must write some more if I don't get distracted by other ideas.
A fine write and pic M. Phew, I won't even start this form with me hymn-poems! It's 'common' for me to stay with me 'Common Metre' often. 8.6.8.6. lines that is!
Cheating a bit, cos that fits to thousands of tunes, yet so many of them I don't know.
Not that I don't repeat myself sometimes in poems, I said, not that I don't...... (I wish I would shut up. lol).
You can repeat yourself as often as you like Orchi,
as often as you like Orchi,
as often as you like Orchi.
Thanks MICHAEL ~ Love the Seascape ~ I am a Coastal Boy at Heart ! Born on the West Coast and living on the East ! Loved the Structure of the UDIT BHATIA (they taste good too ! The contents of the poem is also elegant but mournful ! Please check my HORSE and my FUSION on ANIMALS ~ Thanks ~ Yours BRIAN
Thanks Brian - will do.
Great format and picture Michael.
Cheers Willy
ooooo Michael - you've outdone yourself and I dove into your painting of blue......
You can't beat a good dove - thanks Lorna
She still alone, or she found some company today? Is it today all day, or......oh I did enough on that the other day!
Is that the day after the day before yesterday?
Nope, that's not 'today' - the day after the day before yesterday brings me back to 'yesterday' Now tell me it again - why was she alone? I've lost the plot of the poem now, figuring out what day it is! lol.
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