My Aim.
From the first finger of misty light
fresh rays from
day's entrance shatter black chains
imperceptibly.
Breeze stirs dark dregs to a finish
as streaks of
summer beget break of new dawn
immaculately
An unsullied azure clearly displays
mystic zeal
by brushing up bits of stray grey
imposingly.
Sleep flits away to give day space
and furthers
my aim to unearth fresh challenge
impartially.
Caught in night's shawl is no place
to be when
sun's call entices taste for outing
immediately.
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Author:
Fay Slimm. (
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Up and at 'em Fay! I love "caught in night's shawl" - the Spring juices are calling!
Ha - - love this feeling of Spring ousting from bed any poet who hears the enticement. - -thahks a load for the cheery comment dear Lorna.
Good uplifting write, uplifting into each day.
Yes each day offers Spring juices for a poet's use thanks for the comment dear Goldie
A fine write Fay. Arghh, plunged back into dark mornings soon, when the clocks change? Depends what time we get up! heehee.
Ugh - - I know but it surely will not be long before Spring lightens the mornings too Orchi.
Yes, the hour will 'catch up' soon. We shall have lighter evenings anyway to start with! It's all downhill again from June 21st. A minute or two darker each day. Very negative thought there! lol.
Super work Fay
My thanks to you Michael - - your comments of support are always so welcome.
A wonderful poem! A beautiful write about Spring!
Ah - my sincere thanks dear Christina - so glad you enjoyed the read about Spring.
I concur with Tepo!
Another magical write,
my dear Fay!
Loved the opening of your write...
“From the first finger of misty light
fresh rays from day’s entrance...”
It reminds me of the first
breath we breathe in of
Spring’s fresh air...as in
your beautiful pic! All she
has to do is open that
window abundant with
sunshine and freshness!
~Laura~
Am delighted you enjoyed the write about Spring and her enticement to poets and artists alike dear friend - thank you so much for your perceptive comment.
You’re very welcome!
My pleasure...always!
IMPERCEPTIBLY
IMMACULATELY
IMPOSINGLY
IMPARTIALLY
IMMEDIATE
All these adverbs harbour Spring FAY ~ but they also describe how you pen your daily ODE. I love to comment but alas IMPERFECTLY ! Love the JOY in the picture ~ It is the dorsal view of ANGELA at Daybreak ~ JOY ! Thanks for caring and sharing each day ~ Yours as ever ~ BRIAN
Yes the words chosen do really apply to the joys of Spring dear Brian - - so pleased you enjoyed the picture and poem about the changes this season makes to artists and poets in all walks of life.
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