FROM PASSION TO ENCHANTMENT
(A Journey in Senryu Format)
Uncontrolled passion
Unwelcome by intrusion
Shadows of evil.
Engage self constraint
A master of eagerness
Patience brings rewards.
Visions are summoned
From seas of oblivion
Seeking catharsis
Exalting pursuits
Thoughtful attentive gestures
Virtuous custom.
Floating in slumber
Undisturbed relaxation
Spells of enchantment.
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Author:
Michael Edwards (
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- Comment from author about the poem: Written individually but they work well together. Photo of pulmonaria now coming into its own plus some anemones..
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Good senryu write Michael.
Just one thing the second line of the first senryu should it be unwelcomed, there is no d on the word.
Thanks Andy - not sure about the \'d\' Unwelcomed = not asked as in a guest who was not invited. Unwelcome = not wanted. Must look further as you\'ve now got me thinking.
Just googled it and a lot of confusion out there although 'unwelcome' seems to be more in favour. Will dig deeper when I have time.
It is fine Michael, it is still a fine Senryu.
Thanks Andy but it is an interesting point you raise - will delve .
Unwelcome - sounds like what one would feel about something coming at one. Unwelcomed - sounds like the something coming at one isn't admitted. That's what pops into my head. And your garden is doing so many pretty things.......
An unwelcome guest? Did he/she stay too long? They should say 'I'll get my coat - and be gone!'
Unwelcomed is uninvited (as a guest) - unwelcome is unwanted. That seems to be the general consensus on the sites I've visited so far.
Anyway thanks Lorna for looking in and for your comments.
As for the guest Orchi I'll have to write an ode for her as she can't go if she hasn't come.
Last night I saw upon the stair,
A little girl who wasn't there,
She wasn't there again today
Oh, how I wish she'd go away..
Orchidee - here\\\'s more for your comment: Benjamin Franklin famously said that guests, like fish, begin to smell after three days. Sorry it just popped into my head. Guess that would make them unwelcome and unwelcomed.
A fine write Michael, if we ever get past the first line: 'Uncontrolled passion'. Swoon! lol.
Some poets get niggly when I put 'alway' instead of 'always'. It can be poetic licence, to get something to rhyme with 'say', 'day', etc.
You can a degree in poetic licence - and I'm licenced - My No is 4863321
Thanks MICHAEL ~ The sphere of SENRYU
is infinite even stretching from
Passion to Enchantment !
No. 2 is my favourite I always exercise
Patience especially in LOVE !
I love the PULMONARIA the BLUE
ameliorates the GREEN !
I once went down with PULMONARIA
But apart from a WHEEZE
I'm fully recovered !
Thanks for caring ~ Yours BRIAN !
Was it Pulmonaria Officialis ? You young lungwort you - cheers Brian thanks for your valued comments.
I like the senryu formats, especially the last one. Beautiful pictures! Keep sending them, I'm stuck in winter!
Yes I love this format as well - I'll take some more photos today as I've now posted all the last batch.
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