A FEW EDELECTS
Hand shaken
Money taken
Deal done
Heart sighing
Eyes crying
Love lost
I’ve just devised this new form (I call it an Edelect):
3 lines with two words per line
First word in each line is a noun followed by a verb
Line 3 describes an outcome or conclusion of lines 1 & 2
Both words in line 3 start with the same letter
Rhyme pattern aab
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Author:
Michael Edwards (
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- Comment from author about the poem: Back to painting - a recent abstract in acrylic.
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Clever writes that work very well.
Thanks Andy - easy to do when you have a spare moment.
Good writes and pic Michael. I dunno any two-words-per-line hymn-poems. I might waffle less if I did! How's Ms Berles?!
Thanks Orchi- she's in the counting house counting out her money.
She counting those syllables too? If we get an incorrect number, it can muck up the whole poem!
Mind blowing,
Words flowing,
Great job.
Great stuff Davey - thanks for looking in
Fantastic new form Michael - powerful words - - the abstract reminds me of clean and cold ice - - a treat of a posting and thanks for sharing your work here with us.
So pleased you like the form - I have less and less time to write the longer 'serious' stuff so these short forms are ideal. Now off to the studio to take more photos of my recent 'Modigliani' work.
A clever little trick of the hand sir. I like it. We need to find one of these for a ballad. You're changing things for the better around here! Hear that? It's a revolution coming.
I'm all for the revolution - would be great if others have a go at this form as they did with the Edone form I posted a while back.
Sounds like selling a painting and mourning for its loss...........
Brilliant - yes it does - I do often get very attached to a painting for a variety of reasons (and there is no wall space left indoors) so - yes - it's often so hard parting with them.
GIRL WALKING
MAN STALKING
GAME ON !
Nice Form Mike
Thanks for sharing !
Your BRIAN ~ Please check
my Line Dance Form ~ POEM !
Thanks Brian
Edelect, very interesting format. Love the paint.
Thanks for looking in - so much appreciated m&m.
Michael,
I like this new form of yours...Edelect!
A very interesting acrylic!
Modigliani...that peeked my interest! Is there a particular style of his that you prefer?
~Laura~
I went to his exhibition in the Tate Modern in London a couple of months back and was taken by his sculptures of heads - pleased you like the form Laura.
Have you been influenced by any of his paintings?
To an extent but not significantly. Once I saw the first gallery at the exhibition it all became very samey and dare I say I lost quite a bit of interest. I do like artists who are able to tackle different subjects, try out new techniques, and generally move on with their work. Perhaps that's why I like trying different poetry forms and subjects - jack of all trades and master of none: that's me.
I totally disagree with the last three words!! I like the way you try different forms and subjects! It encourages the rest of us who are hesitant to try something new and/or different! For example, I ventured to try an Edelect thanks to you...
Canvas blank
Painters prank
Japery justified
I won’t mind any constructive criticism from you, Michael!
Awesome new poem form! And I love the new abstract!
So pleased you like it Christina - I'm doing more and more abstract work although I'm not forgetting my watercolours - after all they sell well locally.
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