Michael Edwards

TWO MORE EDELECTS

 

 

 

Truth demands

Reality commands

Subjectivity sucks.

 

 

Grass growing

Cattle grazing

Cheese churning.

 

 

 Two more of my own form - the Edelect:

3 lines with two words per line

First word in each line is a noun followed by a verb

Line 3 describes an outcome or conclusion of lines 1 & 2

Both words in line 3 start with the same letter

Rhyme pattern aab - okay so the second above is aaa - better still !!

Comments9

  • Nicholas Browning

    Hah! Changing it up little by little. You're not wrong though. I don't know much about flowers. Hydrangeas are pretty cool. A shame they don't last long.

    • Michael Edwards

      Yes bit by bit. We cut the hydrangeas when still in full colour and hang them up to dry out - they make superb dried flowers and last for months and months.

      • Nicholas Browning

        I didn't know that! That's awesome. I'll have to check this out.

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      • Goldfinch60

        Both are good but the second one gave me my first chuckle of the day.

        • Michael Edwards

          Thanks Andy - best way to start a Sunday.

        • orchidee

          Fine ede-wotstis and pic Michael. A nice bit of bread and chunk of cheese to go with it?!

          • Michael Edwards

            And home made chutney - cheers O

            • orchidee

              Not mustard though - bleeuurrgghhh. The smell of it is enough, let alone tasting it!

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            • Daveyboyz

              That first one sure is the truth... you seem to know about horticulture, I could write all I know on that subject on the back of a stamp.

              • Michael Edwards

                Yes it comes from my non religious beliefs I guess although I hadn't consciously thought of that when I wrote it. And yes I am a keen gardener. Thanks for looking in Davey.

                • Daveyboyz

                  I share your non-religious views, rationality rules.

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                • BRIAN & ANGELA

                  GRAND NATIONAL
                  Horses Race
                  Ladies Grace
                  Tiger Trolls !

                  Thanks for sharing MICHEAL
                  Complicated form ~ Hope I
                  got near it !

                  Love the EDELECTS as a Scientist
                  I always seek to be OBJECTIVE and
                  seek to Prove my Hypotheses !

                  Cows are WONDERFUL ~ even the
                  Concrete ones in MILTON KEYNES !

                  Love the WHITE DAFFODILS
                  Yours Brian ~ Please check my
                  FRUIT of the SPIRIT ! I do appreciate
                  HUMANISTS show the same TRAITS !

                  • Michael Edwards

                    Yup you've got it and a good 'un at that ! I saw the concrete cow recently and they hadn't moved since the last time I saw them !!! Not sure if I'm a humanist - I'm just a simple guy who holds no beliefs but thanks so much Brian for your continued support - there's room for all of us on this planet (and on MPS) .

                  • Laura🌻

                    Michael,
                    Beautiful pic of the white daffodils! Two more fine edelects! I can just see that “cheese churning “...in my tummy! Lol
                    I like this new form of yours.

                    Here’s my attempt...

                    Canvas blank
                    Painters prank
                    Japery justified

                    Children growing
                    Parents worrying
                    Society smiling


                    Constructive criticism welcomed!

                    ~Laura~

                    • Michael Edwards

                      Thanks Laura - so pleased you like the form. As for criticism the first one is great as written but the second does suggest the problems of growing children so perhaps smiling is the wrong verb. How about :

                      Society spooked or suspicious but both a bit of a mouthful and lacking meter so better still:
                      Neighbours nervous

                      • Laura🌻

                        Thank you Michael! I like “Neighbours nervous”... I’ll even include the “u” in neighbors! 😉

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                      • FineB

                        Thank you Michael.

                        I loved this poem

                        I love the flowers too.

                        Keep writing
                        FineB

                      • ron parrish aka wordman

                        well you nailed it

                      • Lorna

                        It's amazing how much these short lines conjure up - especially the last three - I was out in an open field on a beautiful farm........ your white daffodil is amazing.... we don't see them much here.



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